Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar (verb forms and articles) and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace incorrect words like “bugs” and “traveling” with the correct forms and more appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “scenery,” “landscape,” or “views”). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus. I enjoy watching the changing landscape because the countryside views are very peaceful. For example, I like seeing fields, rivers and small villages as we pass them, which helps me relax during the journey.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and add a linking phrase to connect ideas. Correct verb tenses and articles, and give a specific reason or brief example of what you photograph. Keep the response natural and concise.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window because I enjoy reviewing them later. For instance, I usually photograph interesting architecture or colourful fields so I can remember the places we passed.

提案: Fix vocabulary and collocation errors and give a clear reason with a supporting detail. Don’t use incorrect verbs like “crumbling”; use verbs such as “hiking,” “climbing” or “walking.” Use a linking word to introduce an additional detail and be specific about what you enjoy about the mountains.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and being in nature. Also, I like the fresh air and the impressive views from the peaks, which make me feel relaxed and energized.

× 'Yes I do, I always look out the window when I traveling by bus, especially when the bugs are so pretty.'

✓ 'Yes, I do. I always look out the window when I travel by bus, especially when the views are so pretty.'

'Present tense issue: The clause "when I traveling" uses a present participle where a simple present verb form is required for habitual actions. Change "traveling" to "travel" to match the habitual present tense. Additionally, "bugs are so pretty" seems semantically odd for scenery; "views" fits the context better. Suggestions: use the simple present for habitual actions (I travel, I look).'

× 'Yes, I frequently take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love watching the photos after trip.'

✓ 'Yes, I frequently take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love looking at the photos after a trip.'

'Verb + -ing form: The verb phrase "watching the photos" is unnatural; use "looking at" when referring to viewing pictures. Also, "after trip" is missing an article and should be "after a trip." Suggestions: use "look at" for photos and include articles where needed.'

× 'Yes, I frequently take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love watching the photos after trip.'

✓ 'Yes, I frequently take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love looking at the photos after a trip.'

'Article errors: The noun phrase "after trip" lacks the indefinite article "a." Use "after a trip" to indicate a nonspecific instance. Suggestion: include appropriate articles (a, an, the) with singular countable nouns.'

× 'I prefer the mountains because I love crumbling them and enjoy viewing the views.'

✓ 'I prefer the mountains because I love climbing them and enjoy the views.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' / word choice: "crumbling" is incorrect and nonsensical in context; the correct verb is "climbing" when referring to going up mountains. Also "viewing the views" is repetitive; "enjoy the views" is concise and natural. Suggestion: choose verbs that fit the intended action and avoid redundant phrases.'

× 'I prefer the mountains because I love crumbling them and enjoy viewing the views.'

✓ 'I prefer the mountains because I love climbing them and enjoy the views.'

'Sentence structure errors: The original combines an incorrect verb with a redundant phrase, making the sentence awkward. Replacing "crumbling" with "climbing" and simplifying "enjoying viewing the views" to "enjoy the views" corrects structure and clarity. Suggestion: keep parallel structure for verbs after "because" (I love X and enjoy Y).'