Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it's slightly wordy and contains minor grammatical issues (e.g. 'book for the window seat', 'sceneries'). To improve, use a concise topic sentence, correct collocations, and one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I always try to get a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the landscape. For example, on long flights I like to see the patchwork of fields and coastlines below, which makes the journey more interesting.

提案: Good content and a clear reason, but the sentence is long and has grammatical errors ('views... is', repetition of 'every time'). Improve by giving a concise topic sentence, then one specific example and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: Yes, I often photograph scenes from the window because they are different from my everyday surroundings. For example, last month I took photos of a mountain range from the bus, and those images remind me of the trip.

提案: Your preference and reason are clear, but there are awkward phrases ('go buy a flight') and repetition. Shorten to a direct topic sentence, give a concise reason, and add a brief specific example or consequence. Use correct collocations like 'take a flight' or 'travel by bus'.

例: I prefer the mountains because I'm uneasy about the ocean and sea creatures. As a result, I usually take flights or buses when I travel instead of boats, and I enjoy hiking and mountain scenery more.

× Yes, every time I travel I try to book for the window seat, whether it is by a bus or by a plane, so that I can see the sceneries and the views through the window, especially on a long flight or a long journey.

✓ Yes, every time I travel I try to book the window seat, whether it is by bus or by plane, so that I can see the scenery and the views through the window, especially on a long flight or a long journey.

Errors identified: unnecessary preposition 'for' after 'book' and incorrect plural 'sceneries'. Use 'book the window seat' (no 'for') and 'scenery' is an uncountable noun referring to landscape; do not pluralize it. Also 'by a bus'/'by a plane' is unnatural—use 'by bus'/'by plane'. Suggestion: remove 'for', use 'the' before a specific seat, use uncountable 'scenery', and omit articles with transport modes when speaking generally.

× Yes, I always take pictures on my phone every time I'm traveling and I see the scenery outside the window because the views that I get when I'm traveling is not the usual view that I get on a daily basis, so I try to capture them as much as I can.

✓ Yes, I always take pictures on my phone every time I'm traveling and I see the scenery outside the window because the views that I get when I'm traveling are not the usual views that I get on a daily basis, so I try to capture them as much as I can.

Error: subject-verb agreement and inconsistent count. 'The views ... is' is incorrect because the subject 'views' is plural and requires 'are'. Also maintain plurality: 'not the usual views' matches 'views'. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and keep noun forms consistent.

× I prefer the mountains to the sea because I'm afraid of the ocean and the deep sea creatures, so even if I have to travel, I'd rather go buy a flight or a bus rather than taking a boat and a long trip into the ocean.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I'm afraid of the ocean and deep-sea creatures, so even if I have to travel, I'd rather take a plane or a bus than go on a boat for a long trip into the ocean.

Errors: 'deep sea creatures' should be hyphenated as 'deep-sea creatures' when used as a compound adjective/noun phrase. 'Go buy a flight' is incorrect—use 'take a plane' or 'fly'; 'rather ... than taking' is inconsistent: use parallel forms ('rather take ... than go on ...' or 'rather take ... than take ...'). Also 'go on a boat for a long trip' is clearer than 'taking a boat and a long trip'. Suggestion: use parallel verbs and natural collocations for modes of transport (take a plane, take a bus, go on a boat).