Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 最初に簡潔な主題文を述べ、その後で理由や詳細を論理的に付け加える練習をしてください。現在は言い淀みや文法ミス（例：'I can watching', 重複の'I I'）があり、語順や動詞形を正しく使う必要があります。また、“get car sick”の情報は有用なので、接続詞（because, so）を適切に使って流れを整え、文を短く明確に保つと良いです。発話は3～4文に収め、曖昧な語（watching outside）を具体的に（look at the scenery）に言い換えると自然に聞こえます。

例: Yes, I do. I usually look at the scenery because I enjoy the views outside. Also, I often get car sick, so focusing on the landscape helps me feel better. For example, I like watching passing fields and mountains during long trips.

提案: 応答は主題文→理由→具体例の順で構成しましょう。文法の誤り（'when I traveling', 'I I've', 'want remember to'）を訂正し、過去や現在完了の使い分けに注意してください。具体的な例（いつ、どの場所で、どんな景色を撮るか）を一つ加えると説得力が増します。また冗長な語を減らし、接続詞（because, so, for example）を使って論理的につなげましょう。

例: Yes, I often take photos. When I visit new places like the mountains or the seaside, I photograph the scenery so I can remember it later. For example, I took many pictures of a dramatic sunset on my last trip to the coast.

提案: 最初に明確な結論（I prefer the sea.）を述べ、その後に理由を2つ程度、簡潔に述べましょう。現在の回答は不自然なフレーズ（'I play for the sea', 'I play forward to the sea'）や文法ミスが多く、理由の表現も冗長です。'I can't play any sports'は意味が曖昧なので正確に（'I enjoy beach sports' や 'I like swimming but I'm not good at other sports'）表現を修正してください。具体例（何をするのが好きか、最後に行った海での活動）を加えると良いです。

例: I prefer the sea. I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach, and I also like searching for seashells. For instance, last summer I spent hours collecting shells and swimming with friends.

× Umm yes I do because I like watching outside and I can watching beautiful view in the car so and I usually get car sick so I I watch.

✓ Umm yes I do because I like looking outside and I can see beautiful views from the car, and I usually get car sick so I watch.

The student used incorrect verb forms: 'watching outside' should be 'looking outside' (use 'look' with 'outside' as direction), and 'can watching' is ungrammatical because modal 'can' must be followed by the base verb 'see'. Also 'beautiful view' should be plural 'beautiful views' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use base verbs after modals and choose appropriate verb collocations (look outside, see views).

× Yes I do because when I traveling in anywhere I I've never seen the place like mountain or sea and beautiful sky so I want remember to.

✓ Yes I do because when I travel anywhere I have never seen places like mountains or the sea and beautiful skies, so I want to remember them.

The student used incorrect verb forms and participles: 'when I traveling' should be 'when I travel' (use base form after time clause), and 'I've never seen the place like mountain or sea' needs pluralization and articles: 'places like mountains or the sea'. 'beautiful sky' should be plural 'beautiful skies' or 'the beautiful sky' depending on meaning. Also 'want remember to' is incorrect; use 'want to remember them' or 'want to remember it'. Suggestion: use present simple in time clauses for habitual actions and correct noun number and articles, and use 'want to + verb' structure.

× I play for the sea because I like swimming and I can't play any sports such as beach volleyball and. Looking the seashells so I play forward to the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like swimming and I can play sports such as beach volleyball. I also like looking for seashells, so I look forward to going to the sea.

Multiple errors: 'I play for the sea' is wrong verb choice — use 'prefer'. 'I can't play any sports' contradicts intended meaning; context suggests 'I can play sports'. The fragment 'and.' is incomplete. 'Looking the seashells' should be 'looking for seashells' (correct preposition) or 'collecting seashells'. 'I play forward to the sea' should be 'I look forward to going to the sea' (correct phrase and gerund after 'look forward to'). Suggestion: choose correct verbs (prefer, can), use 'look forward to + -ing', and use correct prepositions (look for).