Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer direct, grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you look out the window, then add one short reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

例: Yes. I usually look out the window when I travel by car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery and it helps me relax.

提案: Be more fluent and organized: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Remove filler words (uh) and fix word order. Use specific examples (what scenes you photograph) rather than vague phrases.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I like capturing passing landscapes, especially rows of trees and mountain views. For example, I take pictures when sunlight makes the trees glow or when the road runs along a river.

提案: Answer the question directly by choosing one (mountains or sea) and give a clear reason with at least one specific detail. Avoid answering 'yes' to a choice question and complete your sentence.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For instance, I like walking on mountain trails and looking at wide views, which helps me feel calm and refreshed.

× When I traveling by car because I love car too much and I like traveling by car is very much.

✓ When I travel by car because I love cars very much and I like traveling by car.

Error type: incorrect verb form and other issues. 'traveling' after 'When I' requires the base form 'travel' (subject + verb). 'car' should be plural 'cars' when speaking generally. The clause 'I like traveling by car is very much' is ungrammatical; remove the extra 'is' and keep 'I like traveling by car.' Suggestion: use 'When I travel by car, I love cars very much and I like traveling by car.' Ensure subject + verb agreement and correct word order. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because, uh, when I travel by car and I see lookout, the outside and uh, trees are passing outside are very beautiful and then I take photos.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because when I travel by car I see the view outside; the trees passing by are very beautiful, so I take photos.

Errors: awkward phrases and incorrect word choice. 'see lookout' is incorrect; use 'see the view' or 'look out' (phrasal verb). 'trees are passing outside are very beautiful' has repetition and wrong word order; use 'the trees passing by are very beautiful.' Also use 'so' to link reason and result. Suggestion: simplify and use correct prepositions and phrasal verbs: 'look out' or 'see the view outside' and 'passing by.' Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, I prefer the mountains or sea because I love mountains and.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I love the mountains.

Errors: Incorrect conjunction/coordination and incomplete sentence. Use 'prefer A to B' structure rather than 'prefer A or B.' The sentence ends with 'and' making it incomplete; remove it and complete the reason. Also use article 'the' before 'mountains' when referring specifically. Suggestion: say 'I prefer the mountains to the sea because I love the mountains.' Grammar problem type ID:16