Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Also correct phrasing about safety (e.g., "I follow traffic rules and don't distract the driver").

例: Yes, I do — looking out of the window is my favorite part of travelling. For example, I enjoy noticing changing landscapes like farmland and city skylines, and I often point out interesting scenes to my friends. Moreover, I always follow traffic rules and avoid distracting the driver.

提案: Provide a direct answer first, then give concrete examples and use correct verb tenses. Use linking words such as "especially" or "for example" correctly, and avoid filler words like "uh" and redundant phrases. Fix word choice ("architecture" instead of "architects").

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially at sunrise or sunset when the light is beautiful. For example, I have photographed waterfalls, rivers and interesting buildings while travelling, and I save them to remember the trip.

提案: Answer directly and give two clear reasons with linking words (e.g., "because" and "also"). Use precise vocabulary ("peaceful atmosphere", "countryside" or "camping"), correct articles, and avoid vague phrases. Keep to three to four sentences maximum.

例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and the scenic views. Also, I like outdoor activities like hiking and camping in mountainous areas. For instance, on my last trip I went camping in the hills and enjoyed both the quiet and the fresh air.

× Of course, this is my favorite part when I traveling.

✓ Of course, this is my favorite part when I travel.

The verb after 'when' should be in the base present form for habitual actions. 'I traveling' is incorrect because the auxiliary 'am' is missing for present continuous, but the intended meaning is habitual, so use simple present 'travel'. Suggestion: Use simple present after 'when' for routines: 'when I travel.'

× I love to watching a view from from the different parts and the different locations at the same time.

✓ I love watching views from different places and locations at the same time.

After 'love' you can use either the infinitive ('to watch') or the gerund ('watching'), but not both ('to watching'). Also 'a view' with 'from the different parts' is awkward; use plural 'views' and 'different places'. Remove duplicate 'from'. Suggestion: Choose either 'I love to watch...' or 'I love watching...'; use plural nouns for general statements.

× I also full follow traffic rules.

✓ I also fully follow traffic rules.

'Full' is an adjective, but an adverb 'fully' is needed to modify the verb 'follow'. Suggestion: Use adverbs to modify verbs: 'fully follow.'

× I did not cross my limit and I just watched.

✓ I did not cross my limits and I just watched.

'Cross my limit' is unnatural; the plural 'limits' is the common expression for boundaries. The past tense 'did not...watched' is partially correct: after 'did not' use base verb 'cross' (correct) and 'watched' is fine for past simple. Here consistency: 'I did not cross my limits and I just watched.' Suggestion: Use idiomatic phrase 'cross my limits' and keep past simple verbs after 'did not.'

× Is I took photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially from the sunset and sunrise.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially at sunrise and sunset.

The sentence begins with 'Is I took', which is ungrammatical. The question was general preference/habit, so use simple present 'I take'. Also use 'at sunrise and sunset' (preposition 'at') and natural word order. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and correct prepositions: 'I take photos... at sunrise and sunset.'

× Uh, for example, I if I saw beautiful waterfalls, rivers and some beautiful architects I always captured.

✓ For example, if I see beautiful waterfalls, rivers, or interesting architecture, I always capture them.

The sentence mixes tenses and has extra words. Use conditional 'if I see' (present for general condition) and 'capture them' to refer to plural objects. 'Architects' is wrong; likely 'architecture' is intended. Suggestion: Use 'if I see' for habitual conditions and ensure pronoun agreement: 'I always capture them.' Replace 'architects' with 'architecture.'

× Oh very nice question 'cause I love traveling, that's it.

✓ Oh, that's a very nice question because I love traveling.

The original has informal contraction placement and awkward structure. Begin with a comma and use 'that's a very nice question because...' for clear sentence structure. Suggestion: Rearrange to a complete sentence and avoid informal fragments in formal responses.

× Honestly, I prefer mountains other than sea because I love peaceful year and beautiful view of mountains.

✓ Honestly, I prefer the mountains to the sea because I love the peaceful atmosphere and the beautiful views of mountains.

Use comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'prefer X other than Y'. 'Peaceful year' is incorrect—likely 'peaceful atmosphere' or 'peaceful year-round' but context suggests 'peaceful atmosphere'. Also add definite articles and pluralize 'views'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer X to Y' and choose appropriate nouns: 'peaceful atmosphere' and 'beautiful views.'

× Especially I like the campaign and adventurous side of the mountain.

✓ Especially, I like the calm and adventurous side of the mountains.

'Campaign' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'countryside' or 'calm'. Use 'calm' (adjective) and plural 'mountains' to match earlier mention. Place adverbial 'Especially' with a comma. Suggestion: Use accurate vocabulary ('calm' or 'countryside') and consistent pluralization: 'the mountains.'