Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ некорректен стилистически и содержит много ошибок грамматики и лексики. Нужно использовать простое, прямое вступление (топик-сентенс), затем одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретикой. Избегайте лишних повторах («it's it's») и неточных слов (например, «Hyperbole typing» непонятно). Работайте над согласованием глаголов и форм существительных (essay -> essays, handwrites -> handwrite) и над плавными связками (because, so, however).

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient for long documents such as essays and reports. For example, at work I can edit and save changes quickly, which saves time. However, I usually handwrite when taking quick notes or during exams.

提案: Ответ распадается на фразы без структурной логики и содержит много ошибок согласования и словоупотребления. Нужно дать чёткий прямой ответ в первом предложении (desktop or laptop), затем одно-два поясняющих предложения с причинами и примерами, используя связки (because, so, also). Следите за числом и формами (I am a student).

例: I type on a desktop keyboard every day because I find the larger screen and full-size keyboard more comfortable. As a student, I often work for long periods, so the desktop helps prevent strain. I usually handwrite only during exams or quick notes.

提案: Ответ содержит много мономентных слов-паразитов и неясные формулировки (Typhoon like? informatic). Нужно обозначить время изучения в первом предложении (e.g., when I was a child), затем пояснить коротко, как вы учились и дать конкретный пример. Убирайте заполнители («uh») и исправьте слова (informatics -> IT).

例: I learned to type when I was a child, around the age of eight. My mother worked in IT, so I spent time on the computer and played games with my brother, which helped me practise and improve my typing skills.

提案: Ответ неоднозначен и содержит противоречивые фразы (practicing game helped me to lose speed and confidence). Нужно ясно сказать, какие методы вы используете сейчас для улучшения (e.g., online exercises, typing software, daily practice), и привести конкретный пример и результат. Следите за временами и согласованием (I started, helped me gain speed).

例: I improve my typing by practising every day using online typing exercises and games. For example, I use a typing tutor that tracks my speed and accuracy, and after a few weeks I noticed my words-per-minute and confidence increased.

× Hyperbole typing because it's it's faster and more convenient for long documents such as essay and the reports.

✓ I prefer typing because it's faster and more convenient for long documents such as essays and reports.

The noun forms were incorrect: 'essay' should be plural 'essays' and 'the reports' should be 'reports' without 'the' here. Also 'Hyperbole' appears to be a wrong word choice; 'prefer' matches the question. Use plural nouns when referring to general examples. Suggestion: use 'essays and reports' for general, countable items.

× I usually type at home or at work, but I handwrites during exams or when I need to take a quick notice.

✓ I usually type at home or at work, but I handwrite during exams or when I need to take a quick note.

Subject 'I' requires the base form 'handwrite' (not 'handwrites'). 'Handwrites' is third person singular. Also 'quick notice' is unnatural; 'quick note' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: use 'I handwrite' and 'quick note.'

× I type on a desktop because I use hands writing.

✓ I type on a desktop because I use handwriting.

The phrase 'use hands writing' is ungrammatical. 'Handwriting' or 'I write by hand' is correct. No third person singular verb error here but the sentence structure is wrong; corrected to a noun 'handwriting.' Suggestion: say 'I use handwriting' or 'I write by hand.'

× I am students.

✓ I am a student.

The pronoun and noun agreement is wrong: 'I' with 'students' (plural) is incorrect. Use singular 'a student' to match 'I.' Suggestion: use 'I am a student.'

× I use handwriting during exams already to take quick notice.

✓ I use handwriting during exams to take quick notes.

'Already' is misplaced and unnecessary. 'Quick notice' should be 'quick notes' (plural). Use noun 'notes' for things taken during exams. Suggestion: 'to take quick notes.'

× Also to type on a desktop.

✓ I also type on a desktop.

Fragment lacking a subject and verb. Combine with full clause: 'I also type on a desktop.' Suggestion: always include subject and verb in a sentence.

× It is so so comfortable or.

✓ It is very comfortable.

'So so' is informal and the trailing 'or' is incorrect. Use 'very comfortable' for a clear statement. Suggestion: avoid filler words; use 'very' or 'quite.'

× I know how to use Typhoon like, uh, keyboard, uh, my mother works, uh, as an informatic and I could play, uh, computer games, uh, as a child.

✓ I know how to use a keyboard; my mother worked in IT, and I played computer games as a child.

Mixed tenses and wrong word choices: 'Typhoon like' is unclear and likely erroneous; 'a keyboard' is correct. 'Works as an informatic' should be 'worked in IT' (subject's mother past job) or 'works in IT' if present — context suggests past. 'Could play... as a child' should be 'played computer games as a child.' Maintain consistent past tense for childhood activities. Suggestion: simplify and use 'I know how to use a keyboard; my mother worked in IT, and I played computer games as a child.'

× And I play computer games with my brother and I, uh, learn how to type.

✓ I played computer games with my brother, and I learned how to type.

Mix of present and past: 'play' should be past 'played' and 'learn' should be past 'learned' to refer to a past event. Also word order: 'my brother and I' becomes 'I played... with my brother.' Suggestion: use past tense for actions that happened in the past.

× I I have a computer and I improve my typing every day and I think I starts to improve my typing at about 10 years old and the practicing game helped me to lose speed and confidence it when I typing.

✓ I have a computer and I improve my typing every day. I think I started to improve my typing at about 10 years old, and the practice games helped me to gain speed and confidence when I was typing.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'I I' duplication removed. 'I improve my typing every day' is fine present. 'I think I starts to improve' should be 'I think I started to improve' (past). 'Practicing game' should be 'practice games.' 'Helped me to lose speed and confidence' is opposite meaning; likely intended 'gain speed and confidence.' 'When I typing' needs past continuous 'when I was typing.' Suggestion: separate into clear sentences, use 'started' for past, 'practice games,' and 'gain speed and confidence.'