Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: state your preference in a topic sentence, then give two brief specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear pronouns and repetition. Improve grammar (e.g., say "handwriting" not "him writing") and contrast with typing using words like "however" or "while".

例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and sincere. For example, I enjoy receiving handwritten notes from friends as they seem warmer. However, typing is more convenient and faster when I need to send messages quickly.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the device, then give specific reasons and an example. Correct informal words (use "because" not "'cause") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect ideas.

例: I use my laptop keyboard every day because I carry my laptop to class and at home. For instance, I often type messages to my family and classmates, so a laptop is more convenient than a heavy desktop.

提案: Start with a concise answer indicating the time, then give a short reason and a specific detail. Remove fillers like "uh" and fix grammar ("we had reports" and "learned to type on the keyboard").

例: I learned to type on a keyboard when I was in elementary school. At that time, we had to complete written reports on computers, so my teacher taught us basic typing skills.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence describing your method, then give specific actions and an example. Use linking words like "for example" or "in addition" and correct phrasing ("practice intelligently" or "practice regularly").

例: I improve my typing by practicing regularly and using targeted exercises. For example, I do short daily drills to learn key positions and use typing tests to monitor my speed and accuracy.

× I prefer him writing 'cause I think handwriting let me feel warm and it's sincere.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I think it makes me feel warm and sincere.

Wrong pronoun 'him' used before a gerund; use the noun 'handwriting' as the object. Also 'let me feel' is unnatural here; use 'makes me feel'. Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'.

× Sincerely the other hands.

✓ On the other hand, handwriting feels more sincere.

Phrase 'Sincerely the other hands' is ungrammatical and incorrectly ordered. Use the transitional phrase 'On the other hand' and form a full clause. Also 'sincerely' as an adverb doesn't fit; use 'sincere' to describe 'handwriting'.

× Typing is convenient, but it's more efficient.

✓ Typing is convenient and more efficient.

Sentence is understandable but the contrasting conjunction 'but' is misleading; combine ideas with 'and'. No tense issue; fix stylistic clarity by removing conflicting contrast.

× I tap on my laptop every day 'cause I need.

✓ I use my laptop every day because I need to.

Use 'use' instead of 'tap' for general daily use. 'Because I need' is incomplete; include 'to' or an object: 'because I need to' (do so) or 'because I need it'.

× I always send message to my mom or family or my classmate and I seldom use desktop Desktop.

✓ I always send messages to my mom, my family, or my classmates, and I seldom use a desktop.

'Message' should be plural 'messages' for repeated actions. Use consistent plural for 'classmates' if referring generally. 'Desktop' needs an article 'a' when singular and not previously mentioned. Remove duplicate 'Desktop'.

× It's too heavy to bring and it's not really convenient to me.

✓ It's too heavy to carry and it's not very convenient for me.

Use 'carry' instead of 'bring' for transporting an object. 'Convenient to me' is incorrect collocation; use 'convenient for me'. 'Not really' is informal; 'not very' is clearer.

× When I was in elementary school, uh, we have some reports need to do and I learned how to type keyboard at that time so I can type as well as other people do then.

✓ When I was in elementary school, we had some reports to do, and I learned how to type on a keyboard then, so I could type as well as other people.

Tense inconsistency: put actions in the past ('had', 'learned', 'could'). Use infinitive 'to do' after 'reports' and include preposition 'on' with 'keyboard'. Remove redundant 'at that time' and place 'then' appropriately.

× I learned how to type keyboard at that time so I can type as well as other people do then.

✓ I learned how to type on a keyboard then, so I could type as well as other people.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'type'. Also adjust tense: past 'could' instead of present 'can' and remove redundant 'do then'.

× For me, doing as well as my classmate is to practice as smart as you can.

✓ For me, matching my classmates' skill requires practicing as efficiently as possible.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Doing as well as my classmate is to...' is incorrect structure. Suggest clear subject and verb: 'matching... requires practicing'. Use 'efficiently' rather than 'as smart as you can'.

× That means you can be familiar with the keyboard and you just need to intensively practice.

✓ That means you can become familiar with the keyboard and you just need to practice intensively.

Use 'become familiar' instead of 'be familiar' for process. Adverb placement: 'intensively' should follow the verb 'practice' rather than before it. 'Practice intensively' is natural.