Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency, and make answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix errors (e.g., 'my handwriting is messy' and 'it saves me time'), and avoid redundant phrases. Add one specific example to support convenience claim and use a linking phrase.

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because my handwriting is messy and often hard to read. Moreover, typing saves me time since it’s easy to edit and copy-paste text. For example, when I prepare reports for university, I can quickly reorganize paragraphs and correct mistakes without rewriting the whole page.

提案: Correct grammar and use clearer linking. Say 'I type on a laptop every day' and explain why with a specific detail about syncing. Remove fillers like 'uh' and fix subject-verb agreement ('it syncs'). Add a concise supporting example of when syncing helped you.

例: I type on a laptop every day because it’s the most efficient device for my work and study. It also syncs with my phone, so I can access documents on the go. For instance, I often edit an essay on my laptop and then review it on my phone while commuting.

提案: Make the answer more fluent and specific. Start with the time ('in elementary school'), remove hesitation, and describe the typing games briefly as the reason you improved. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas.

例: I learned to type in elementary school during computer classes. At first I was unsure because it was new to me, but we played simple typing games which improved my accuracy and speed, so I became comfortable using the keyboard.

提案: Provide a clear method and specific actions for improvement. Avoid vague statements and fillers. Use a topic sentence describing how you improve now (practice, online tools, touch-typing) and give a short specific example of a practice routine or resource. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I improve my typing mainly through regular practice and using online typing tutors. For example, I spend 15 minutes daily on a typing website to practice touch-typing and track my speed and accuracy. Over time, this routine helped me type faster and make fewer mistakes.

× I prefer typing to writing by hands because my handwriting messy, often hard to read.

✓ I prefer typing to handwriting because my handwriting is messy and is often hard to read.

Missing linking verb 'is' to describe the adjective 'messy' and awkward phrase 'writing by hands'. Use 'handwriting' as noun and add 'is' before adjectives. Also connect clauses with 'and' for clarity.

× On the other hand, when I type something, it's really convenient to edit, copy, paste text, so it helps me save my time.

✓ On the other hand, when I type something, it's really convenient to edit, copy, and paste text, so it helps me save time.

When listing verbs, include parallel structure with 'and' before the last item. Also 'save my time' is awkward; use 'save time' (general statement). No -ing issue in verbs but parallel gerund structure required.

× I do type on laptop every day.

✓ I type on my laptop every day.

Use simple present 'I type' rather than emphatic 'do type' unless stressing. Also include the possessive 'my' before 'laptop' and article 'a' or 'the' if needed.

× Uh, I like that it sync with my phone so I can transfer my documents or file faster if I don't need to worry about.

✓ Uh, I like that it syncs with my phone so I can transfer my documents or files faster and not have to worry about them.

Verb must agree: 'it' requires 'syncs'. Use plural 'files' to match 'documents or files' and rephrase 'don't need to worry about' to 'not have to worry about them' for clarity and correct pronoun reference.

× When I was in elementary school, we had a computer class. I was not convinced at first because I hadn't tried it.

✓ When I was in elementary school, we had a computer class. I was not convinced at first because I had not tried it before.

Use 'had not' written fully for formality and add 'before' to clarify the sequence. The past perfect is acceptable; adding 'before' improves clarity.

× Uh, we often played a simple typing games.

✓ Uh, we often played simple typing games.

Remove the indefinite article 'a' because 'games' is plural. No -ing correction needed beyond noun phrase agreement.

× They helped us improve skills and finally it made me comfortable.

✓ They helped us improve our skills and finally made me feel comfortable.

Add possessive 'our' for 'skills' and change 'it made me comfortable' to 'made me feel comfortable' for natural expression. Also remove redundant 'it' before 'made'.

× I don't think there's any special tips.

✓ I don't think there are any special tips.

'Tips' is plural, so use 'there are' not 'there's' (contraction of 'there is') and keep 'any special tips' plural.

× When I was young, I, uh, used desktop for my old assignments, all the homework, uh, I believe that the system more efficient way, uh, at the ends, I felt comfortable with the.

✓ When I was young, I used a desktop for my old assignments and all my homework. I believe that the system was a more efficient way, and in the end, I felt comfortable with it.

Add article 'a' before 'desktop' and possessive 'my' before 'homework'. Reorder and insert verbs: 'was' for past description. Use 'in the end' not 'at the ends' and supply the object 'it' after 'with'. Also connect ideas with 'and' for clarity.