Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, um). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with a brief example. Remove redundancy (e.g., "and and"). Aim for smooth linking (e.g., "however" followed by a short contrast).

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and makes editing easy. For example, I can quickly reorganize sentences on my laptop. However, I sometimes handwrite notes because writing by hand helps me remember information better.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence naming the device, remove hesitation words, and finish the thought. Use linking words to connect reasons (e.g., "because"), and keep it to two or three sentences. Be specific about occasions when you use other devices.

例: I use a laptop keyboard every day because I write code and take notes during online meetings. Occasionally I use a desktop keyboard when I need a larger screen or a more ergonomic setup.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant but remove filler words and slightly tighten the structure. Start with the age, then briefly explain the context using one linking phrase like "because" or "during".

例: I learned to type when I was eight. During a school computer course we had demonstrations of input devices, and that class taught me the basics of keyboard typing.

提案: Good content and specific methods — remove small grammar issues and unnecessary words. Use linking words to list methods (e.g., "first," "also," "finally"). Give one concrete metric or example of progress if possible.

例: I improve my typing by practicing daily with online typing programs to increase speed and accuracy. I also focus on proper finger placement and good posture, and I simulate real tasks by typing emails and code to track my progress.

× I prefer typing because it is much faster and a convenient way for me to edit and draft emails and and take notes.

✓ I prefer typing because it is much faster and a more convenient way for me to edit and draft emails and take notes.

The sentence uses 'a convenient' alongside 'much faster' and needs parallel comparison: 'a more convenient way' correctly compares convenience. Also there is a repeated 'and'. Suggestion: use comparative 'more convenient' and remove the duplicated 'and'.

× Since most of my day-to-day responsibilities and work in includes implementing code and taking notes during the, uh, digital meetings, umm, I tend to use the keyboard on the laptop from my everyday purpose.

✓ Since most of my day-to-day responsibilities include implementing code and taking notes during digital meetings, I tend to use the laptop keyboard for my everyday work.

The original has incorrect word order and extraneous prepositions ('in includes', 'on the laptop from my everyday purpose') and filler words. Correct structure: subject 'responsibilities' with verb 'include' (plural agreement) and concise phrase 'laptop keyboard for my everyday work'. Remove fillers like 'uh' and 'umm' in written responses.

× Umm, occasionally I do use.

✓ Occasionally I do use it.

The sentence is incomplete and missing an object. Adding the pronoun 'it' completes the thought referring to the keyboard. Also remove filler 'Umm' in writing.

× I was 8 years old when I was first introduced to a computer.

✓ I was 8 years old when I first learned to use a computer.

'Was first introduced to a computer' is passive and acceptable but awkward; using 'first learned to use a computer' is clearer and fits the context of learning to type. Keep past tense consistency. Alternatively, 'I was first introduced to computers at 8' would also work.

× So during one of my computer courses, I learned to, uh, type on the keyboard for the first time.

✓ So during one of my computer courses, I learned to type on the keyboard for the first time.

Remove filler 'uh'. The verb structure 'learned to type' is correct; no -ing needed. The original had unnecessary hesitation markers.

× I practice regularly using online typing programs to build speed and accuracy, which helps me reduce mistakes and increases words per minute.

✓ I practice regularly using online typing programs to build speed and accuracy, which helps me reduce mistakes and increase my words per minute.

Subject 'which' refers to 'practice' (singular) so verbs describing results should be parallel: 'helps me reduce' and 'increase' (not 'increases'). Also include 'my' before 'words per minute' for clarity.

× I also focus on proper finger placement and posture, and I occasionally tend to type emails or access to simulate practical situations and track progress.

✓ I also focus on proper finger placement and posture, and I occasionally type emails or practice tasks to simulate practical situations and track progress.

The phrase 'access to simulate' is incorrect. Use 'practice tasks' or 'practice exercises' and remove 'tend to' which is redundant with 'occasionally'. Use 'type emails or practice tasks' for correct verb-object structure.