Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 話の構成はできていますが、口頭のための自然な言い回しと流暢さを高める必要があります。具体的には、フィラー（uh, umm）を減らし、同じ語句の繰り返し（"made made mistakes" や "by handwriting" の重複）を避けて、1つか2つの具体例または理由で答えを簡潔にまとめてください。たとえば「理由→具体例→結論」の順で一貫した短い文を作るとよいでしょう。また、語彙を少し拡張して "handwriting" の短所を具体的に説明すると効果的です。

例: I prefer typing because it lets me write more quickly and accurately. When I wrote by hand in high school, my handwriting was often messy and I made careless mistakes. For these reasons, typing is much more efficient for me.

提案: 理由は明確ですが、文法と語順の誤り（"desktops, screen is wider" や "located high above the desk desk" の繰り返し）を直し、フィラーを減らして簡潔に述べてください。リンクワード（"because", "so", "therefore"）を適切に使い、具体的な利点（larger screen, better posture）を1〜2点挙げると説得力が増します。

例: I use a desktop every day because I work on it. The desktop has a larger screen and the monitor is at eye level, which makes it more comfortable for long periods of work.

提案: 過去の出来事を説明するための時制と語彙の選択を改善してください。表現の誤り（"run it by myself" や "the Internet was even very popular"）を自然な英語に直し、理由と方法を簡潔に説明しましょう。例として、"I taught myself by playing games" のように具体的な動作を述べると良いです。

例: I didn't learn typing at school; I taught myself when I was in elementary school. Because home internet and computer games were popular, I practiced typing a lot while playing games and gradually improved.

提案: 答えの時制を統一し、冗長な表現とフィラーを減らしてください（"uh" や "for the society" の曖昧さ）。具体的にどのような練習をしたか（練習時間、頻度、使ったソフト名や練習方法）を1〜2文で示すと説得力が増します。また、結果（speed/accuracy improved）を付け加えると良いです。

例: I improved my typing by practicing with typing games and software my father bought me in high school. I practiced for about 20 minutes every day, which improved both my speed and accuracy.

× In contrast, by handwriting, I often make mistakes.

✓ In contrast, when I write by hand, I often make mistakes.

The preposition phrase 'by handwriting' is unnatural in English. Use the verb phrase 'write by hand' or 'handwrite'. Change structure to 'when I write by hand' for clarity and correct preposition use.

× For example, uh, when I was a high school student, I took exams by handwriting, but I often, umm, made made mistakes by handwriting.

✓ For example, when I was a high school student, I took exams by handwriting, but I often made mistakes when writing by hand.

The sentence repeats a word and uses an unnatural prepositional phrase. Use past tense consistently ('made') and the gerund phrase 'writing by hand' instead of 'by handwriting'. Remove duplicate 'made'.

× I type on the desktop every day because I use it for my work.

✓ I type on the desktop every day because I use it for my work.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. (Included for completeness; no change required.)

× The reason is that desktops, uh, screen is wider than that of the laptop and uh, the screen of the desktop is uh, located high above the uh, desk desk, so it is very comfortable.

✓ The reason is that a desktop's screen is wider than a laptop's, and the desktop screen is positioned higher above the desk, so it is very comfortable.

Use possessive forms 'desktop's' and 'laptop's' rather than 'desktops, screen' and 'that of the laptop'. Remove repetition 'desk desk'. Use 'positioned higher above the desk' for natural phrasing.

× I did not learn how to type on a keyboard in a educational institution.

✓ I did not learn how to type on a keyboard in an educational institution.

Article error: 'a educational' should be 'an educational' because 'educational' begins with a vowel sound. Past tense usage 'did not learn' is correct.

× Instead, I run it by myself, because when I was a elementary school student, the Internet was even very popular.

✓ Instead, I taught myself, because when I was an elementary school student, the Internet was already very popular.

'Run it by myself' is incorrect; use 'taught myself' or 'learned it myself'. 'a elementary' should be 'an elementary'. 'Even very popular' is unnatural; 'already very popular' fits better.

× So I tried many, many computer games and learned it.

✓ So I played many computer games and learned how to type.

Use 'played' for games and be specific: 'learned how to type' rather than vague 'learned it'. This corrects improper verb and clarifies the object of learning.

× I improved my typing skill by doing typing games.

✓ I improved my typing skills by playing typing games.

Use plural 'skills' and verb 'playing' rather than 'doing' for natural collocation. Past tense 'improved' is correct.

× When I was a element of high school student, my father bought me a typing soft UH.

✓ When I was in high school, my father bought me typing software.

Phrases 'a element of high school student' is incorrect; use 'in high school'. 'Typing soft UH' is likely 'typing software'. Remove filler utterance.

× This is because he thought that typing was essential skill for uh, for the society.

✓ This is because he thought that typing was an essential skill for society.

Add article 'an' before 'essential skill'. 'for the society' is unnatural; use 'for society' without 'the'. Remove filler words.

× So I do it and uh hone my skill.

✓ So I practiced it and honed my skill.

Maintain past tense to match context: 'do' and 'hone' should be 'practiced' and 'honed'. Alternatively 'honed my skills' (plural) is more natural.