Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 발음 오류를 고치고, 중복되는 표현을 제거하세요. 주제문으로 바로 답하고 이유를 두세 가지로 구체적으로 제시하세요. 예를 들어 ‘convenient’ 외에 휴대성, 저장·편집의 용이성, 속도 등을 덧붙이면 내용이 풍부해집니다. 또한 ‘I can I can’ 같은 중복을 피하고 ‘keep everywhere’ 대신 ‘take it anywhere’ 또는 ‘access my work anywhere’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

例: I prefer typing on my laptop because it’s more convenient. It’s faster than handwriting, and I can save and edit my work easily. Also, I can take my laptop anywhere, which makes it practical for studying and working.

提案: 문장을 완결형으로 만들고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. ‘because’ 뒤에는 반드시 이유를 연결하고, ‘them’ 같은 모호한 대명사 대신 명확한 명사를 사용하세요. 또한 연결 어구(First, Also, Because)로 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 유지하세요.

例: I usually use a laptop keyboard because it’s portable. For example, I can work in different rooms or at a café. Also, the laptop keyboard is compact and easy to carry compared with a desktop setup.

提案: 연결어를 정리하고 시간 표현을 자연스럽게 하세요. 주제문으로 연습 시점을 바로 말한 뒤, 어떻게 배웠는지를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 'to play a game' 대신 'for playing games' 또는 'to play online games'처럼 정확한 목적 표현을 쓰세요.

例: I learned to type when I was about ten years old. I started practising because I wanted to play online games, so I learned common key combinations and gradually improved my speed.

提案: 문장 길이를 적절히 유지하고 문법을 정리하세요. ‘As I mentioned that’는 불필요하게 길므로 생략하거나 간단히 하고, ‘old brother’ 대신 ‘older brother’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 연습 방법을 구체적으로(예: 타자 연습 사이트, 게임, 반복 연습) 나열하고 연결어로 흐름을 정리하세요.

例: I improved my typing mainly by playing computer games and practising regularly with my older brother. In addition, I used online typing exercises to build accuracy, which helped me increase my speed over time.

× I prefer typing with my laptop because it is convenient and I can I can keep everywhere.

✓ I prefer typing on my laptop because it is convenient and I can take it everywhere.

The sentence repeats 'I can' (repetition error) and uses 'keep everywhere' which is incorrect; the correct verb is 'take' when referring to carrying a device. Also use preposition 'on' with 'typing on my laptop'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and choose correct verb+preposition collocation (take it everywhere).

× I usually use a laptop keyboard because. It can access them anywhere and.

✓ I usually use a laptop keyboard because I can use it anywhere.

The original has a sentence fragment 'because.' and unclear pronoun reference 'them'. The subject and verb are missing in the first clause; 'it' should refer to the laptop, singular. Suggestion: combine into a complete sentence with clear subject and pronoun: 'I can use it anywhere.'

× Hmm, it almost I was 10 years old, uh, to play a game.

✓ I started when I was about 10 years old to play games.

Original mixes words and order incorrectly. Use past tense 'started' to indicate when the action began and 'when I was about 10 years old' for time expression. Also use plural 'games' or 'a game' consistently. Suggestion: place time expression after 'when' and use 'started' for initiation of learning.

× As I mentioned that I play a game to improve my typing skill, I practiced a lot with my old brother, so my typing became quite fast.

✓ As I mentioned, I played games to improve my typing skills; I practiced a lot with my older brother, so my typing became quite fast.

Use past tense 'played' to match 'practiced' (completed past actions) and plural 'games' or 'game' consistently. 'Old brother' is awkward in English; use 'older brother'. 'Typing skill' is typically pluralized as 'typing skills'. Also punctuation: use commas/semicolons for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense, correct adjective 'older', and pluralize 'skills'.