Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "more easy" → "easier", "plus that" → "and"). Mention a concrete example (e.g., sharing lecture notes) to be specific.

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and easier to edit than handwriting. For example, as a university lecturer I can quickly update and share lecture notes with students using a laptop, which saves time and improves collaboration.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Correct grammar and word choice ("more easy" → "easier", "modern instrument" → "modern device"). Give one specific reason and one brief example comparing laptop and desktop to strengthen the answer.

例: I type on a laptop every day because it is more convenient and portable than my old desktop. For instance, I can work from different rooms or during meetings, while the desktop stays fixed and feels outdated.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear past-time topic sentence and correct tense errors. Avoid repeated filler words. Provide a specific time and describe how you learned (e.g., formal class, practice) with one linking phrase ("when I was in high school").

例: I learned to type when I was in high school. We had a computer class where we practiced typing regularly, and with daily exercises I became much faster and more accurate.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and specific methods. Use correct verbs ("improving" not "proving") and avoid repetition. Mention concrete activities and a result, linked with words like "for example" or "by" to show cause and effect.

例: I improve my typing by practicing every day through my work and coursework. For example, I type lecture materials, complete assignments online, and sometimes play typing games, which has gradually increased my speed and accuracy.

× I prefer typing because it's more easy to use and convenient, especially for the longer documents, plus that it is easy to edit or share my work with my colleagues.

✓ I prefer typing because it is easier to use and more convenient, especially for longer documents, and it is easy to edit or share my work with my colleagues.

Use comparative adverb/adjective 'easier' instead of 'more easy', and use parallel comparative structure 'easier and more convenient'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'longer documents'. Replace informal 'plus that' with 'and' for clearer conjunction usage.

× So this is important for my studies and work because I work as a lecturer in the university.

✓ This is important for my studies and work because I work as a lecturer at the university.

Use 'at the university' or 'at a university' rather than 'in the university' when referring to one's workplace. 'At' indicates employment location; keep sentence concise by removing 'So' at start.

× I am using my laptop because the keyboard is more easy to use and the convenience, while the desktop is difficult to use and old.

✓ I use my laptop because its keyboard is easier to use and more convenient, while the desktop is old and harder to use.

Prefer simple present 'I use' for habitual actions. Use 'easier' and 'more convenient' (comparative forms) and correct word order 'old and harder to use'. Use possessive 'its keyboard'.

× So I prefer the modern instrument to use than all the instruments and it's easy to edit long documents.

✓ So I prefer modern devices to older ones, and it's easier to edit long documents on them.

The original has an incorrect comparative structure 'prefer ... to ... than'. Use 'prefer A to B' or rephrase. Replace 'instrument' with 'devices' for clarity and adjust sentence to be natural and parallel.

× I learn, I learn, I learn the typing on keyboards that are going.

✓ I learned to type on keyboards a long time ago.

Use past tense 'learned' for completed past action. Remove repetition and unclear phrase 'that are going'; condense to natural expression.

× I was in high school that my I have I had a class of computer and we are practicing on the schools by by the time I become more stronger.

✓ I was in high school when I had a computer class, and we practiced at the school, so over time I became stronger (better) at typing.

Rephrase to correct word order and tense: use 'when' for time clause, past 'had' and 'practiced', and past 'became'. 'More stronger' is redundant; use 'stronger' or better 'better'. Remove duplicated words and clarify meaning.

× As I say, I'm proving my typing by using the keyboard every day in my work, in my daily life and and my assignments as well as that come in the practice in playing games.

✓ As I said, I'm improving my typing by using the keyboard every day at work, in my daily life, and for my assignments; I also practice when playing games.

Use past 'As I said' to refer to earlier statement. Use 'improving' (not 'proving') and present continuous 'I'm improving' for ongoing action. Fix prepositions 'at work' and 'for my assignments', remove duplicated 'and', and simplify 'come in the practice' to 'I also practice'.

× So by the time I become more, more practical.

✓ So over time I have become more skilled (more practical) at typing.

Use present perfect 'have become' to show change over time up to now, and correct awkward phrase 'more, more practical' to 'more skilled' or 'more practical'. Ensure clarity and appropriate tense.