Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจน ตอบตรงคำถามก่อน (topic sentence) แล้วให้เหตุผลที่เฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "typing" แทน "climbing" และลดความซ้ำซ้อน ใช้เชื่อมประโยคอย่างง่ายเช่น because, so, for example เพื่อให้ความหมายลื่นไหลและเป็นธรรมชาติ

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is faster and more convenient. For example, when I need to share information quickly I can type an email or message and send it immediately. This saves time and makes it easier to edit what I write.

提案: ตอบให้ชัดว่าใช้เครื่องไหนทุกวัน และแก้ไวยากรณ์พื้นฐาน เช่น tense และคำสรรพนาม ใช้ประโยคที่สั้นและตรงประเด็น เพิ่มรายละเอียดว่าทำไมใช้เครื่องนั้น (location, convenience)

例: I usually type on a desktop computer because I have one in my room. It is more comfortable for long work sessions and has a full keyboard, so I prefer it over a laptop.

提案: ตอบด้วยประโยคเริ่มต้นที่ชัดเจนระบุเวลา (e.g. in high school) และให้รายละเอียดที่เกี่ยวข้อง เช่น วิธีการเรียนหรือกิจกรรมที่ช่วยฝึก ใช้ tense ให้ถูกต้องและลดความซ้ำซ้อน

例: I learned to type in high school when our school had a computer lab. I spent time there using the computers for classes and also playing games, which helped me practice typing regularly.

提案: ชี้ให้เห็นวิธีที่เป็นรูปธรรมในการปรับปรุงทักษะ เช่น การฝึกด้วยโปรแกรมฝึกพิมพ์ การตั้งเวลา ฝึกความถูกต้องและความเร็ว ใช้ประโยคชัดเจนบอกสิ่งที่ทำจริง ๆ และผลลัพธ์ที่เกิดขึ้น อย่าใช้คำที่ไม่เกี่ยวหรือคลุมเครือ

例: I improve my typing by practicing with online typing programs for 15 minutes every day to increase my speed and accuracy. I also focus on correct finger placement and avoid looking at the keyboard while I type.

× I prefer climbing hard, is easily and is faster and more convenient for me the spot yet especially when I need to share something quickly.

✓ I prefer typing because it is easier, faster, and more convenient for me, especially when I need to share something quickly.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and a confused structure (run-on and misplaced phrases). Replace 'climbing hard' with 'typing' to match the question. Use a clear clause 'because it is easier, faster, and more convenient for me' and place the adverbial phrase 'especially when I need to share something quickly' at the end. This fixes sentence structure errors and ensures parallel adjectives 'easier, faster, and more convenient.' Suggestion: keep subject + verb + reason clause and use parallel adjectives.

× For example, I have a holiday message and send a long e-mail when I can.

✓ For example, I might have a holiday message and can send a long e-mail quickly.

The original is awkward and unclear: 'when I can' is vague. Recast to express possibility ('might have') and purpose or ability ('can send a long e-mail quickly'). This corrects sentence structure and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use modal verbs to express possibility and place adverbs close to verbs.

× I'm literally type on the desktop because I have a computer in my room not help me do the desktop.

✓ I usually type on the desktop because I have a computer in my room that helps me use it.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms: 'I'm literally type' is wrong; 'type' needs a correct auxiliary or simple present 'I usually type.' The clause 'not help me do the desktop' is ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'that helps me use it.' Fixes third person and sentence structure errors by using correct subject-verb agreement and clearer relative clause. Suggestion: use adverb 'usually' for routine actions and correct relative pronoun.

× I learn to type a keyboard when I studying high school study at high school we have a computer room and I usually go to this room to play game.

✓ I learned to type on a keyboard when I was studying in high school; we had a computer room and I often went there to play games.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. For a past event, use past tense 'learned' and 'was studying.' Use preposition 'on' with 'type on a keyboard.' Use past tense 'had' for the computer room and plural 'games.' This corrects tense consistency and preposition use. Suggestion: keep past events in past tense and use correct prepositions.

× I just pay him a lot every time every day when they try and maybe I'm con chatting with my friend.

✓ I just practice a lot every day, but when I try, I sometimes get distracted chatting with my friends.

Original sentence has unclear verbs and pronouns ('pay him a lot', 'they try', 'con chatting') and wrong structure. Replace with 'practice a lot' to match improving typing, use 'but' to show contrast, and 'sometimes get distracted chatting with my friends' for clarity. This fixes sentence structure and pronoun reference problems. Suggestion: use clear subjects and verbs and correct collocations like 'practice' and 'get distracted.'

× This make me can't improve my typing.

✓ This makes it hard for me to improve my typing.

Subject-verb agreement error and unnatural word order: 'This make' should be 'This makes' (third person singular). Also 'me can't improve' is ungrammatical; use 'makes it hard for me to improve.' This corrects verb form and word order. Suggestion: use 'make' with correct agreement and an appropriate infinitive phrase to express difficulty.