Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / however). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "at the same time at all" or "fill in the distant world." Aim for natural vocabulary and simpler sentence structures.

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient for communication on social media and at work. However, I also enjoy handwriting occasionally because it feels personal and relaxing, especially when I write cards or notes.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement about frequency and device, then give one or two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition (e.g. "I remember that it's important to use"). Use specific examples (office emails, messaging apps) to make content concrete.

例: I don't type every day; it depends on my schedule. On busy workdays I use a laptop to write emails and chat with colleagues, but on quieter days I prefer face-to-face conversations to avoid constant screen time.

提案: Begin with a clear time reference (e.g. "as a child"), then give concise specific details about how you learned. Avoid long, confusing clauses and redundant comments about being "talented" unless giving a brief example. Use linking words like "then" or "so" for coherence.

例: I learned to type as a child. At a family gathering I tried using a PC for the first time, and my relatives showed me the basics. My parents saw my interest and bought me a computer, which helped me practice more often.

提案: Give a clear current method and a past routine with concrete details. Use linking words (e.g. "nowadays"/"previously") and avoid imprecise phrasing like "did quite automatically." Provide a specific practice technique (timed exercises, typing software) and frequency to show deliberate improvement.

例: These days my typing comes naturally, but previously I improved it by practicing daily. For example, I used online typing exercises and timed drills, and I also read aloud while typing notes during university lectures to build speed and accuracy.

× I prefer typing because it's the fastest way to interact with people and it is at the same time at all when needed to use in our social media world.

✓ I prefer typing because it's the fastest way to interact with people and it is also useful when needed in our social media world.

The original sentence uses awkward adverb phrases 'at the same time at all' and 'when needed to use' which are ungrammatical and confusing. Replace with 'also useful when needed' to convey that typing is useful for social media. Use 'useful' (adjective) with 'is' and place the adverbial phrase 'when needed' after it for natural word order.

× But at the same time, handwriting is a quite fascinating activity that you can do just to fill in the distant world because it's a bit old fashioned but fascinating at the same time.

✓ But handwriting can be a quite fascinating activity, even though it is a bit old-fashioned.

The original has redundant and unclear phrases like 'fill in the distant world' and repeats 'fascinating' twice. Simplify to a clear contrast using 'even though' and correct adjective 'old-fashioned.' Remove unclear idioms and redundant repetition for clarity and grammaticality.

× No, it mainly depends on the day.

✓ No, it mainly depends on the day.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. It uses present simple correctly to express habitual variation. No change needed.

× On busy days I tend to type on keyboard just to interact with my colleagues and to convey messages more rapidly.

✓ On busy days I tend to type on the keyboard just to interact with my colleagues and convey messages more rapidly.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'keyboard' (article error) and remove the unnecessary 'to' before 'convey' when coordinating verbs after 'tend to type... and convey' for parallel structure. The verbs should be parallel: 'type... and convey.'

× But on general days I prefer to talk face to face to people and avoiding using tools because I don't prefer it much.

✓ But on normal days I prefer to talk to people face to face and avoid using tools because I don't like them much.

Use 'normal days' instead of 'general days' for natural collocation. After 'prefer' the structure is 'prefer to + verb' or 'prefer + gerund'; keep parallel structure: 'prefer to talk... and avoid...' Also change 'talk face to face to people' to 'talk to people face to face.' Replace 'I don't prefer it much' (unnatural) with 'I don't like them much' referring to tools.

× Otherwise I remember that it's important to use.

✓ However, I believe it is important to use technology when appropriate.

'Otherwise I remember that it's important to use' is ungrammatical and vague. Use 'However, I believe' for contrast and specify the object 'technology' and add 'when appropriate' to make the sentence complete and meaningful.

× And to take advantage of technology as much as we can to make the most of it generally.

✓ We should take advantage of technology as much as we can to make the most of it.

Fragment beginning with 'And to' lacks a main verb. Recast as a full sentence 'We should take advantage...' to provide a subject and finite verb. Remove 'generally' which is redundant.

× When I was a child, it was in my parents and we went on a special occasion with some relatives of ours where there was a PC standing in front of me and I started using it and they taught me I was quite talented, gifted for it and that's the reason why my parents decided to buy me one and it was my first entering into the PC World.

✓ When I was a child my parents took me to a family gathering where there was a PC in front of me. I started using it and they said I was quite talented at it, so my parents decided to buy me one; it was my first entry into the PC world.

Original has several issues: 'it was in my parents' is incorrect (sentence structure/pronoun use), run-on sentence, and awkward phrase 'entering into the PC World.' Break into shorter sentences, use past simple consistently ('took,' 'started,' 'said,' 'decided'), correct prepositions ('in front of me'), change 'gifted for it' to 'talented at it,' and use 'entry into' rather than 'entering into.' Also decapitalize 'world.'

× It did quite automatically nowadays, but in the previous years I used to exercise regularly every day just by pronouncing some words and at the same time typing them on the keyboard, which was quite useful, especially to take notes at university with my technological tools.

✓ It works quite automatically nowadays, but in previous years I used to practice regularly every day by saying words aloud and typing them on the keyboard, which was quite useful, especially for taking notes at university using my technological tools.

'Did quite automatically nowadays' mixes past and present; change to present 'works quite automatically nowadays.' Use 'practice' rather than 'exercise' for skill improvement. Use 'saying words aloud' for clarity and parallel structure 'saying... and typing.' Change 'to take notes' to 'for taking notes' and 'with my technological tools' to 'using my technological tools' for natural preposition use.