Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use 'taking pictures' or 'photographing'), avoid repetition, and use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'cherish' instead of 'bracious'). Keep to about 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I photograph landscapes to preserve memories and to share special moments with friends and family, so I can look back on them later.

提案: Give a clear preference in the topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons and one example. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'I used to prefer urban areas, but now I prefer rural areas when I travel') and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas.

例: I used to prefer urban views for their energy, but now I prefer rural views when I travel because they are peaceful and offer beautiful natural scenery. For example, I recently visited a countryside village where the quiet rivers and fields were very relaxing.

提案: Provide a direct answer first (e.g. 'I prefer views in other countries') and then give a concise reason with a specific detail. Avoid filler words and unclear vocabulary. Use one linking phrase (e.g. 'because' or 'so') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultures that I haven't seen before. For instance, I enjoy photographing foreign architecture and coastal scenery that are different from what I have at home.

× Yes, I do picturing.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures.

The verb 'do' is not used with a gerund 'picturing' in this context. Use the verb 'like' followed by the gerund 'taking' to express a general preference. Also 'picturing' is not the correct collocation; 'take pictures' or 'taking pictures' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'I like taking pictures.' to express a habitual preference.

× I do like picturing, you know, picturing views, meaning you are keep them as a bracious memories for the future.

✓ I do like taking pictures of views, meaning you keep them as precious memories for the future.

Multiple issues: 'do like picturing' should be 'do like taking pictures' (correct verb+noun collocation). 'Picturing views' is awkward; 'taking pictures of views' is natural. 'You are keep' mixes auxiliary and base verb incorrectly; use simple present 'you keep'. 'Bracious' is not an English word; intended 'precious'. Suggestion: Use simple present for general statements and correct collocations: 'I do like taking pictures of views; you keep them as precious memories.'

× You can also share them with others and remember it later, which is a very special moment.

✓ You can also share them with others and remember them later, which creates a very special moment.

Pronoun 'it' refers to a singular noun but 'pictures' is plural, so use 'them'. Also 'which is a very special moment' is awkward; better to say 'which creates a very special moment' or 'which is a very special experience.' Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× It's been I was thinking previously I'd like more to stay in an urban areas, but guess what, when I travel outside, I really enjoy being in a rural areas.

✓ I used to think I would prefer staying in urban areas, but when I travel, I really enjoy being in rural areas.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect articles/plural use. 'It's been I was thinking previously' is ungrammatical; use 'I used to think' or 'I previously thought'. 'I'd like more to stay' is awkward; 'I would prefer staying' is natural. 'An urban areas' and 'a rural areas' mix article 'an' with plural 'areas' — remove article with plural. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and match articles with singular/plural nouns.

× You know, when I went to other vision, I really.

✓ You know, when I went to other places, I really enjoyed them.

'Other vision' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'other places' or 'other regions'. Sentence is also incomplete ('I really' needs completion). Suggestion: Use a clear noun ('places' or 'countries') and finish the clause: 'I really enjoyed them.'

× I'm a big fan of fused, uh, in generally we can speaking that I love views everywhere no matter what, but mainly, you know, uh, in my country I saw I see all the views already.

✓ I'm a big fan of travel. In general, I can say that I love views everywhere, but mainly in my country I have already seen most of the views.

'Fused' is incorrect word; likely 'travel' intended. 'In generally' should be 'In general'. 'We can speaking' is wrong; use 'I can say' or 'we can say'. 'I saw I see' mixes past and present; use present perfect 'I have already seen' to indicate completed experiences. Suggestion: Use appropriate nouns and standard adverbial phrases: 'In general, I can say...; I have already seen most of the views in my country.'

× So visiting others, uh, country views is absolutely, absolutely.

✓ So visiting views in other countries is definitely something I enjoy.

Original word order and articles are incorrect: 'others, uh, country views' should be 'views in other countries'. Repetition 'absolutely, absolutely' is verbal filler; replace with 'definitely' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'views in other countries' and a complete predicate: 'is something I enjoy' or 'is definitely enjoyable.'