Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容要点明确但表达有语法和用词错误，句子过长且不自然。建议使用一到两句直接回应，然后用一两个具体理由或例子支持。注意时态一致（一般现在时），改正形容词和词语搭配（relaxable → relaxed / relaxed and free）。例如可说“I enjoy photographing different views because it relaxes me. When I take photos, I can focus on small details like light and texture, which helps me forget stress.”

例: I enjoy photographing different views because it relaxes me. When I take photos, I focus on light and texture, which helps me forget my worries.

提案: 答案表达了偏好和理由，但语法和词序有问题，重复啰嗦。建议用一到两句给出明确立场，再用具体对比说明原因，使用连词如“because”或“while”。修正时态（一致用一般现在时）和可数名词（tall buildings）。例如：“I prefer rural views because I live in a city and tall buildings make me feel stressed, while the countryside feels peaceful.”

例: I prefer rural views because I live in a city and the tall buildings often make me feel stressed, while the countryside feels calm and refreshing.

提案: 回答含糊且有重复和口头语（uh），表达不够清晰。建议直接说明偏好并给出具体原因或例子，避免重复“prefer”。改用更自然的表达并去掉不必要短语。例如说“I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exotic landscapes and different cultures; for example, I love colourful markets and historic architecture abroad.”

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exotic landscapes and different cultures. For example, I love seeing colourful markets and historic architecture when I travel abroad.

× I like taking pictures of different view because it made me feel relaxable and I can free myself when I was trying.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because it made me feel relaxed and I can free myself when I try.

问题：名词单复数和形容词/动词形式不当。说明："different view" 应为复数 "different views"，因为指不同的景色。"made me feel relaxable" 用词错误，应为形容词 "relaxed" 描述感受；"relaxable" 很少用于描述人。时态和语态：最后部分原句用过去 "was trying" 不清楚，改为一般现在 "when I try" 与前半句 "I like" 保持一致。建议：使用复数名词，选择正确的形容词，保持时态一致。

× I prefer the views in the rural area because I was living in a city and I saw lots of like a tall building and it made me feel stressful. So I prefer a rural area better than the urban areas.

✓ I prefer the views in rural areas because I live in a city and I see lots of tall buildings and they make me feel stressed. So I prefer rural areas to urban areas.

问题：时态、单复数和比较结构错误。说明："the rural area" 与上下文不一致，应使用复数或不定形 "rural areas"。"I was living in a city" 改为一般现在时 "I live in a city" 表达习惯或事实。"I saw lots of like a tall building" 中有冗余词和单复数错误，应为 "I see lots of tall buildings"。"it made me feel stressful" 用法错误，"stressful" 描述事物，正确应为 "stressed" 描述人的感受。比较句 "I prefer a rural area better than the urban areas" 语法重复，正确结构是 "prefer A to B"。建议：使用正确时态（现在习惯用现在时）、名词复数、区分形容词和被形容对象，并用固定比较结构。

× I prefer visiting other countries because I prefer the exotic, uh, foreign views, which is with the last tourism that is better for my taste.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries because I like exotic foreign views, which suit my taste better.

问题：代词和从句结构使用不当。说明：原句中 "which is with the last tourism that is better for my taste" 结构混乱且代词指代不清，应该用关系代词 "which" 指代前面的名词短语 "exotic foreign views"，并用动词短语 "suit my taste" 表达“更合我的口味”。去掉多余的词如 "the last tourism"。建议：使用清晰的关系从句，用合适的动词短语表达偏好，避免插入语干扰句子结构。