Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers, correct grammar, and choose precise words. Explain why you take photos with one or two supporting details using linking words. For example, replace vague or incorrect words like “trouble” with accurate nouns such as “trip” or “visit.”

例: Yes, I do. When I arrive at a new place, I usually take many photos to record special moments. For example, I photograph landscapes and local life so I can remember the atmosphere and share the experience with friends.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then add a specific reason with linking words. Fix grammar (use full sentences) and avoid short fragmented phrases. Mention concrete examples of what you enjoy in rural areas to make your answer more vivid.

例: I prefer rural areas because I live in a busy city and want a change of pace. For instance, I enjoy quiet walking trails and open fields, which help me relax and breathe fresh air.

提案: Avoid repetition and correct vocabulary errors. Start with a clear statement, then give specific reasons with linking words (e.g., because, so). Replace incorrect words like “sport” with “spot” or “site,” and use plural/singular correctly. Provide a short example of a country or type of place you like.

例: Honestly, I prefer views in other countries because popular tourist spots in China are often crowded. Therefore, I try to visit quieter countryside areas abroad, such as small villages in Japan or rural Portugal, where I can relax and enjoy local scenery.

× Yes, I like when I arrived a new place.

✓ Yes, I like it when I arrive at a new place.

The original sentence has incorrect tense and missing object structure. 'When I arrived a new place' mixes past tense with a general present preference; use present simple 'arrive' to express habitual action. Also include 'it' as a dummy subject for 'like it when...' and use the preposition 'at' with 'place'. Suggestion: use 'I like it when I arrive at a new place.'

× I will take tons of pictures to record my, umm, precious memory of this trouble.

✓ I take tons of pictures to record my precious memories of the trip.

Multiple issues: tense and modality (stating habitual action should use present simple 'I take' not 'I will take'), wrong noun 'memory' should be plural 'memories', wrong noun 'trouble' should be 'trip', and filler 'umm' removed. Use 'to record my precious memories of the trip.'

× I prefer rural areas because I live in urban areas, so I want to feel some different in my trip.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I live in an urban area, so I want to feel something different on my trip.

Issues: article and singular/plural ('an urban area' fits better for where you live), 'feel some different' is ungrammatical—use 'feel something different'. Also use preposition 'on' with 'my trip'. This corrects preposition and word choice errors.

× Could make me relax more.

✓ It could help me relax more.

Original is a sentence fragment without a clear subject or auxiliary. Add subject 'It' and verb 'help' for clear meaning: 'It could help me relax more.' This fits the conditional/modal idea from previous sentence.

× To be honest, I prefer the view in other countries.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the views in other countries.

Minor number agreement: 'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. Use plural to match general preference.

× To be honest, in vacation, every famous sport is crowded in China, so I want to find a quiet countryside in other country to relax myself.

✓ To be honest, during vacations, every popular spot in China is crowded, so I want to find a quiet countryside in another country to relax.

Several errors: use 'during vacations' or 'on vacation' for time expression; 'every famous sport' is incorrect—should be 'every popular spot'; 'in other country' needs article and becomes 'in another country'; 'relax myself' is awkward—use 'relax' or 'relax myself' is acceptable but unnecessary. The corrected sentence fixes prepositions, word choice, articles, and idiomatic phrasing.