Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and hesitations, and add a brief specific detail to enrich the answer. Use one linking word if adding an extra point.

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural scenes such as mountains and forests because the light and colors change throughout the day, and I often capture local people engaged in outdoor sports to add a human element to my photos.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference (either urban or rural) and give a specific reason. Avoid saying both unless you contrast them clearly. Use linking words (for example, because, whereas) and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement).

例: I prefer rural views because the countryside offers quieter landscapes and more unspoiled scenery, whereas urban views are often busy and dominated by buildings.

提案: Give a direct answer and a concise, specific reason. Avoid repetition and filler words. Mention one or two specific attractions or qualities that make your country special, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has a lot of beautiful mountain ranges and lush green valleys, and I feel more comfortable exploring familiar sights and local traditions.

× Yes, I like, I like taking picture of natural areas and, uh, mountains and, uh, other sports activities.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of natural areas, mountains, and other sports activities.

The plural noun 'pictures' is required when talking about taking multiple photos (singular/plural issue). Also 'taking' correctly uses the verb + -ing form to indicate the activity. Remove the repeated 'I like' and unnecessary fillers for clarity; separate items with commas and use 'and' before the last item.

× Yes, of course I prefer view in urban areas and rural areas because the people of rural areas is like different to urban areas people.

✓ Yes, of course I prefer views in both urban and rural areas because people in rural areas are different from people in urban areas.

Use the plural 'views' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue). 'People' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'different from' rather than 'different to', and 'people in urban areas' is the correct word order.

× Yes, I I, I prefer to be used in my own country because I like my own country and there are so many beautiful places and mountains and natural areas and greenness, so I prefer in my own.

✓ Yes, I prefer to travel in my own country because I like it and there are so many beautiful places, mountains, and green areas, so I prefer staying in my country.

'Prefer to be used' is incorrect — use 'prefer to travel' or 'prefer staying' (verb choice). 'Greenness' is unnatural; use 'green areas' or 'greenery' (word choice/adjective use). The preposition 'in my own' is incomplete; use 'in my country' or 'staying in my country'. Also remove repeated filler 'I I, I'. The sentence needed correct prepositions and clearer verbs.