Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (use gerunds/infinitives correctly), and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I do. I find taking photos of different views very relaxing because it helps me forget about daily stress. For example, when I walk along the river and photograph the trees and reflections, I feel calm and more focused.

提案: Improve sentence accuracy and conciseness. Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give specific supporting details and use linking words (for example, "because" or "for instance"). Correct noun and adjective forms (e.g., "illuminated buildings" and "spectacular views").

例: I prefer urban views because I love the city skyline, especially at night. For example, the illuminated buildings and bustling streets create a dramatic contrast and a lively atmosphere that I enjoy photographing.

提案: State your preference clearly and give one or two specific reasons with examples. Avoid repetition and improve grammar (use plural forms and natural phrases like "comfortable for me" and "more familiar"). Use a linking phrase such as "because" or "mainly because".

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel more familiar and comfortable to me. For instance, I know the best scenic spots and the seasonal changes there, so I can capture moments that are meaningful to me.

× Absolutely, because the taking picture of different view can release my stress and relax me and taking picture can memorable can capture.

✓ Absolutely, because taking pictures of different views can relieve my stress and help me relax, and memorable photos can capture moments.

The sentence uses incorrect singular/plural forms: 'the taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' and 'different view' should be 'different views'. Use plural nouns when referring to general activities or multiple instances. Also 'taking picture can memorable can capture' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'memorable photos can capture moments.' Additionally, 'release my stress' is not the usual collocation; use 'relieve my stress' and add 'help' before 'me relax' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer view in urban areas more because I love the city skyline and the way the lights look at night.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I love the city skyline and the way the lights look at night.

'I prefer view' is incorrect adjective/noun usage; use plural 'views' when speaking generally. 'Prefer...more' is redundant; 'prefer' already implies comparison, so omit 'more.' The rest of the sentence is fine.

× The illuminate buildings are so spectacular view.

✓ The illuminated buildings are such a spectacular sight.

'Illuminate' is the base verb; the correct adjective is the past participle 'illuminated' to describe the buildings. 'Spectacular view' with 'are' is mismatched; use 'sight' as a noun that matches 'are' ('buildings are a sight') or rephrase as 'look spectacular.' Also use the determiner 'such a' before 'spectacular sight.'

× I prefer view in my own country because my own country's view is more comfortable for me and and my view is so spectacular.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country's scenery is more familiar to me and I find the views very spectacular.

'I prefer view' and 'my own country's view' should use plural forms ('views' or 'scenery') when speaking generally. 'More comfortable for me' is better expressed as 'more familiar to me.' Also remove the duplicated 'and and.' Rephrase 'my view is so spectacular' to 'I find the views very spectacular' for clarity and naturalness.