Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and natural: state a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take close-up shots of grass and wide shots of cloudy skies because I like capturing textures and dramatic lighting.

提案: Clarify vocabulary and structure: start with a direct statement, use correct nouns (e.g., ‘urban areas’, ‘skylines’, ‘riverside’), and give one succinct reason with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like ‘comments’.

例: I prefer urban views, such as skylines and riverside scenes, because they feel vibrant and there are many cultural activities and cafes to explore nearby.

提案: Make the response coherent and specific: state your preference clearly, give concise reasons and correct grammar (e.g., ‘my country’s views’), and avoid vague or incorrect phrases like ‘too much places’ and ‘haven't gone to youth’. Use linking words to show contrast if needed.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many interesting places I enjoy visiting. However, I also want to travel abroad in the future to discover landscapes I haven’t seen yet.

× Yes, of course I would like to take pictures of different, different news like uh, grass in the ground, the cloudy weather.

✓ Yes, of course I'd like to take pictures of different views, such as grass on the ground and cloudy weather.

Errors: repetition ('different, different'), wrong noun ('news' instead of 'views'), awkward phrase 'grass in the ground', informal filler 'uh'. This is a sentence structure and word choice problem. Suggestion: remove redundancy, replace 'news' with 'views', use 'such as' to give examples, and use 'grass on the ground' for correct preposition. Also contract 'I would' to 'I'd' for natural speech if desired. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer urban use like Skylines, Riverside Commerce for their vibrancy and comments when I want cultural activities or cafes nearby me.

✓ I prefer urban areas, like skylines and riverside commercial areas, because of their vibrancy and amenities when I want cultural activities or cafes nearby.

Errors: 'urban use' is wrong word choice; should be 'urban areas'. 'Riverside Commerce' is unnatural; better 'riverside commercial areas'. 'comments' is incorrect; likely intended 'amenities' or 'attractions'. 'nearby me' should be 'near me'. This mixes adjective and noun issues and preposition misuse. Suggestion: use accurate nouns ('areas', 'amenities'), correct word order, and the preposition 'near' with 'me'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I prefer my own country's use because in my country there are many places to visit and I also visited too much places, but I want to explore many more others which I haven't gone to youth.

✓ I prefer places in my own country because there are many places to visit. I have already visited many places, but I want to explore many more that I haven't been to yet.

Errors: 'my own country's use' is incorrect wording; use 'places in my own country'. 'visited too much places' is ungrammatical: 'too much' cannot modify countable 'places' — use 'many' or 'too many', and past experience needs present perfect 'I have already visited many places' for relevance. 'which I haven't gone to youth' has several errors: 'gone to' requires 'been to' in this context, and 'youth' is wrong word; should be 'yet'. Suggestion: split into two clearer sentences, use present perfect to show experiences up to now, use 'been to' and 'yet', and correct quantifier usage. Grammar problem type ID:22