Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words and long fragments. Focus on correct verb forms, countable/uncountable nouns, and natural phrases (e.g., “different places,” “unique atmosphere”).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different places because each location has its own atmosphere and charm. For example, in Spain I like to photograph colourful streets and people in traditional clothing, while in Japan I prefer capturing peaceful gardens and cute street scenes. These differences inspire me to take more photos.

提案: Give a direct preference first, then support with 1–2 clear reasons using linking words (because, for example). Use simple, correct vocabulary: “urban” or “rural,” “architecture,” “nature,” “atmosphere.” Keep sentences short and avoid vague expressions.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and lively streets. For example, tall buildings and busy markets create interesting photo subjects, and I feel excited exploring different neighbourhoods.

提案: Answer directly then explain with specific comparisons. Use correct grammar for preferences (e.g., “I prefer views in my country” or “I prefer views in other countries”), and give clear reasons and examples. Avoid contradictory phrases and word errors (e.g., “sell different style”).

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different styles and sights I can't see at home. For example, I love visiting Europe to photograph old castles and historic streets, which are very different from the modern buildings in my country.

× I really like take picture in different news because every place has special and advantage and I really like the fight.

✓ I really like taking pictures in different places because every place has something special and an advantage, and I really like the vibe.

The verb 'like' when followed by another verb requires the -ing form (gerund); 'take' should be 'taking'. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general preference. 'News' is incorrect contextually and should be 'places'. 'Special and advantage' is ungrammatical; use 'something special and an advantage'. 'Fight' is likely a mishearing of 'vibe'; 'vibe' fits the context.

× For example if I go Spanish is have Latina vibe and I will want to take more picture and have Latina dress up and if you ancient and for example Japan I wanna be cute because every.

✓ For example, if I go to Spain it has a Latina vibe and I will want to take more pictures and wear Latina-style clothes; and for example, in Japan I want to be cute because of the culture.

Prepositions: use 'go to Spain' not 'go Spanish'. 'Have' with subject requires proper clause: 'it has a Latina vibe'. 'Take more picture' -> plural 'pictures'. 'Have Latina dress up' -> 'wear Latina-style clothes'. 'If you ancient' is unclear; interpreted as 'and for example, in Japan'. Use 'in Japan' and 'because of the culture' to complete the idea.

× A modest city floor of a towering beauty and really like it is like I just live in the very technique, umm generation and I will feel just amazing and I was excited when it's out here and wanna take more picture.

✓ I prefer a modest city with towering beauty; I really like it because I feel like I live in a modern, technical generation, and I feel amazing and excited when I'm there and want to take more pictures.

Original sentence is fragmented and lacks clear clauses. Reorganize into coherent clauses: 'I prefer a modest city with towering beauty' and explain reasons. 'Very technique' -> 'modern, technical' or 'high-tech'. Use correct verb forms: 'I feel', 'I'm there', 'want to take more pictures'. Plural 'pictures' and consistent tense/personal forms required.

× I will feel just everything is no more not special.

✓ I feel like nothing here feels special anymore.

Use natural English structure: 'I feel like' + clause. Original 'no more not special' is a double negative and ungrammatical. Use 'nothing... special anymore' and present tense 'feel' to match general preference.

× But if I go to other country, I will sell different style and like I'm traveler.

✓ But if I go to another country, I will see different styles and because I'm a traveler, I like that.

Pronoun and word choice: use 'another country' not 'other country' when singular. 'Sell' is incorrect verb; likely 'see' was intended. 'Different style' -> 'different styles'. 'I'm traveler' needs an article: 'I'm a traveler'.

× I like go to Europe and they're pretty, so amazing and beautiful.

✓ I like going to Europe; the places there are so pretty, amazing, and beautiful.

'Like go' should be 'like going' (gerund). 'They're pretty' is vague; clarify 'the places there are pretty'. Use punctuation to separate ideas and list adjectives properly.

× It's like all the generation and very pretty, like castle.

✓ It's like an entire era and very pretty, with castles.

'All the generation' is awkward; use 'an entire era' or 'a generation'. 'Like castle' is incorrect; use 'with castles' to indicate presence of castles. Ensure adjectives modify nouns correctly.