Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy (e.g. "pictures of taking the view"). Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I prefer pictures that include myself or my friends in the scene because they capture memories; for example, I often take selfies on city rooftops or at riversides to remember the moment.

提案: Answer directly, then support with clear, specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (because, for example) and avoid repetition. Mention one or two concrete urban features.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because they often combine interesting architecture with pockets of greenery. For example, I enjoy photos of riverside promenades and parks framed by modern buildings because the contrast makes my pictures more striking.

提案: Give a clear position (both, either, or one) and then explain with specific examples and correct tense. Use linking words (also, for example, because) and avoid repetition of phrases like "there was".

例: I prefer both my country and other countries because each offers different attractions. For example, in Riyadh province there are many villages with green fields and a clean environment, while traveling abroad lets me photograph unique landscapes and cultural landmarks.

× I would like to take pictures when I was in the view and I take pictures of myself with my friend or by selfie or.

✓ I would like to take pictures when I am at a viewpoint, and I take pictures of myself with my friend or by selfie.

The original uses 'was' which incorrectly places the clause in past tense. The phrase 'in the view' is not natural; use 'at a viewpoint' or 'in the view' -> 'at a viewpoint'. Also maintain present tense for habitual action ('I take pictures'). Use 'by selfie' -> 'by taking selfies' or simply 'selfies'. Suggestion: use present simple for general preferences and correct noun phrases. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I like the view of urban areas because in urban areas there was many greenery seen seen in background and it like cherry on the cake in pictures which I clicking and then there was river you know also in urban areas.

✓ I like views of urban areas because there is a lot of greenery in the background, and it is like the cherry on the cake in the pictures I take; there is also a river in urban areas.

Problems: subject-verb agreement ('there was many greenery' -> 'there is a lot of greenery' or 'there were many green areas'); incorrect repetition 'seen seen'; wrong verb form 'which I clicking' should be 'I take' or 'that I take'; 'it like' needs 'it is like'; tense consistency and word order improved. Use 'a lot of' for uncountable 'greenery' and 'there is' for singular uncountable. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I prefer both the views in my country also is good view because of clear environment and no pollution.

✓ I prefer both, but the views in my country are also good because of the clean environment and low pollution.

Errors: sentence structure and subject-verb agreement ('views... is' -> 'views... are'); 'clear environment' -> 'clean environment' is more natural; 'no pollution' -> 'low pollution' or 'little pollution' fits comparative context. Maintain present tense for preference. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And in my country at Riyadh side there were there was many village and in village there was many fields which look like greenery fields.

✓ And in my country, on the Riyadh side, there are many villages, and in the villages there are many fields that look very green.

Errors: repeated 'there were there was' and incorrect agreement with countable nouns ('many village' -> 'many villages'; 'there was many fields' -> 'there are many fields'). Use 'there are' for plural. Improve preposition 'at Riyadh side' -> 'on the Riyadh side' and use adjective 'green' or 'very green' rather than 'greenery fields'. Grammar problem type ID:3

× I would like to take pictures when I was in the view and I take pictures of myself with my friend or by selfie or.

✓ I would like to take pictures when I am at a viewpoint, and I take pictures of myself with my friend or by taking selfies.

The phrase 'by selfie or' is incomplete; use the gerund 'taking' after 'by' when describing a method ('by taking selfies'). Also ensure tense consistency: 'was' -> 'am' for present preference. Grammar problem type ID:10