Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Antwort verbessern: Vermeiden Sie Fehler und unnötige Wörter; korrigieren Sie das falsche Wort („shoes“ → „views“) und reduzieren Sie Füllwörter. Strukturieren Sie die Antwort mit einem klaren Thema, gefolgt von einem konkreten Beispiel. Verwenden Sie Verbindungswörter, um Flüssigkeit zu schaffen.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I visit new places I often photograph the surroundings, such as historic palaces or public parks, because they capture the character of the area.

提案: Antwort verbessern: Achten Sie auf präzise Wortwahl und Grammatik (z. B. „reassuring“ passt hier weniger, besser „peaceful“; „It's quite" → „It's quiet"). Ergänzen Sie ein kurzes Vergleichsdetail mit einem Verbindungsausdruck wie „because“ oder „while".

例: I prefer rural areas because the landscapes are beautiful and the atmosphere is peaceful. While urban areas can be vibrant, the countryside offers quieter roads and more open space for relaxing walks.

提案: Antwort verbessern: Seien Sie direkter im Thema und geben Sie konkretere Gründe. Vermeiden Sie vage Formulierungen wie „get insights of new places“; nutzen Sie stattdessen „experience different cultures" oder "see famous landmarks". Halten Sie die Antwort in 2–3 klaren Sätzen mit passenden Verbindungswörtern.

例: I would prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures and see famous landmarks. Although I don't travel much within my own country, visiting abroad would let me discover new landscapes and traditions.

× I prefer rural areas because the landscapes there are beautiful and the atmosphere is reassuring.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the landscapes there are beautiful and the atmosphere is relaxing.

The adjective 'reassuring' is not appropriate for describing an atmosphere in this context. 'Reassuring' means giving comfort about a concern; 'relaxing' or 'calm' better describes an atmosphere that reduces stress. Suggest replacing with 'relaxing' or 'calm' to convey the intended meaning.

× It's quite and not so noisy like in urban areas.

✓ It's quiet and not as noisy as in urban areas.

The original sentence uses 'quite' incorrectly and omits the comparative structure. 'Quite' should modify an adjective (e.g., 'quite quiet'), and the comparison requires the structure 'not as noisy as'. Replace 'quite and not so noisy like' with 'quiet and not as noisy as' for correct adjective use and comparison.

× So I don't go out often even in my own country, but I would like to visit places in other countries to get insights of new places.

✓ I don't go out often, even in my own country, but I would like to visit places in other countries to get insight into new places.

The sentence is wordy and contains awkward phrasing. 'Insights of new places' is incorrect; use 'insight into new places' to express gaining understanding or impressions. Also move 'even in my own country' for clearer flow. The revised sentence improves structure and preposition use.

× I like taking pictures of different shoes.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views.

This appears to be a likely slip: 'shoes' is incorrect in context. If the student means photographing views, 'views' is the correct noun. The gerund 'taking' is fine. If the student actually meant 'shoes', then context should be clarified; otherwise replace with 'views' to match the question.

× For example, when I go to new places I like to take pictures of umm, the surrounding, like the palace or the park.

✓ For example, when I go to new places I like to take pictures of the surroundings, like the palace or the park.

'Surrounding' is a noun here and should be pluralized to 'surroundings' to refer to the area around a place. Also include a comma after 'places' for clarity. Using 'the surroundings' correctly refers to the environment or scenery around a location.