Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более естественно и грамматически правильно, избегайте лишних артефактов речи (например, «a nature», пауз «uh», «umm»). Дайте короткое обоснование, используя связку, чтобы ответ был связным и информативен (не больше 3–4 предложений). Также используйте более точную лексику: «nature», «landscapes», «selfies».

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing nature and landscapes because they change with the seasons and offer interesting colours and textures. However, I rarely take selfies since I prefer capturing scenes rather than people.

提案: Устраните повторения и паузы; стройте предложение чётко: сначала давайте утверждение, затем объяснение с использованием связок (for example, because, while). Приводите конкретные примеры особенностей городских и сельских видов, чтобы показать диапазон лексики и конкретику.

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each has its own charm: urban skylines offer dramatic architecture and lively streets, while rural landscapes provide tranquillity and natural beauty.

提案: Исправьте грамматику и произношение ключевых слов, уберите жаргонные вставки («uh», «umm»). Формулируйте предложение ясно: сначала утверждение, затем конкретные детали (например, типы пейзажей) с использованием связок и правильной множественной формой («mountains», «lakes»). Добавьте пару конкретных примеров, чтобы ответ выглядел более содержательным и естественным.

例: I prefer the scenery in my own country because it is very diverse and beautiful. For example, we have high mountains, clear lakes and vast forests, which offer many great spots for photography.

× I like taking pictures of a nature, but I don't like taking self pictures.

✓ I like taking pictures of nature, but I don't like taking selfies.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the uncountable noun 'nature'; no article is needed. 'Self pictures' is unnatural; the correct noun is 'selfies'. Suggestion: remove 'a' before 'nature' and use the common plural 'selfies'.

× I prefer both of them because I think both of them have, uh, have, uh, their own charm.

✓ I prefer both because I think they each have their own charm.

Repetition and filler words make the sentence awkward. 'Both of them' can be shortened to 'both' and 'they each have' is clearer than repeating 'have'. Suggestion: remove fillers and redundant phrases for clarity.

× I prefer yours in my own country.

✓ I prefer those in my own country.

The pronoun 'yours' incorrectly refers to possession; the intended meaning is to refer to 'views', so 'those' (demonstrative pronoun) is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'those' or 'the ones' to refer back to 'views'.

× Uh, I think my own country scenery is so beautiful.

✓ I think the scenery in my country is very beautiful.

Word order is awkward: use 'the scenery in my country' rather than 'my own country scenery'. Also 'very' is more natural than 'so' in this context. Suggestion: rearrange noun phrase and choose appropriate degree word.

× We have a umm, mountains have a lakes have a lot, a lot of umm.

✓ We have mountains and lakes; there are a lot of them.

Fragmented structure and incorrect use of 'a' before plural nouns ('a mountains', 'a lakes') are wrong. Use plural nouns without 'a' and join ideas with 'and' or use a clause 'there are a lot of them'. Suggestion: remove 'a' before plural nouns and form complete sentences connecting ideas.