Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'different' used repeatedly).

例: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views. For example, near my home there are coastal cliffs, busy markets and green parks, so I often capture contrasts between nature and city life.

提案: Give a clearer structured answer: state preference, then give contrasting examples with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I need to learn'. Use specific vocabulary (e.g., 'architecture', 'street scenes', 'landscapes').

例: I prefer both urban and rural views. In cities I enjoy photographing architecture and bustling street scenes, whereas in the countryside I like wide landscapes and natural light, so I choose depending on the mood I want to capture.

提案: Make your answer coherent and remove filler words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific comparisons using linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'while'). Avoid vague phrases like 'challenging 1' and repeating 'beaches'.

例: I prefer both, depending on what I'm looking for. For example, in my country I can photograph tropical beaches and vivid coastal scenes, while in other countries I might find mountains, historic towns or different climates that offer new photographic opportunities.

× I love taking different views, especially here in my place that had a a different a diverse amount of views around my area.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views, especially here in my area which has a diverse range of views.

Original sentence has plural/singular and word choice problems: 'a a different a diverse amount of views' is ungrammatical. Use 'a diverse range of views' (countable plural 'views' with 'range') and match verb tense/person: 'my place that had' should be 'my area which has' to agree with present habit. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases and use correct quantifier for countable nouns.

× It is my hobby and I do really love taking pictures.

✓ It is my hobby, and I really love taking pictures.

The phrase 'do really love' is grammatically possible but awkward; better to use simple adverb placement 'really love'. The error relates to adverb placement and unnecessary auxiliary. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'do' and place 'really' before main verb.

× To be honest, I prefer both. I'm actually a city guy and also I need to learn.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both. I'm actually a city guy, but I also want to learn about rural photography.

'and also I need to learn' is vague and structurally awkward. The sentence needs a contrasting conjunction 'but' and a clear object for 'learn'. Suggestion: specify what you want to learn and use appropriate conjunction.

× I love taking tall buildings with different kind of architectural designs, in the streets filled with people, filled with vehicles and also with nature.

✓ I love photographing tall buildings with different kinds of architectural designs, streets filled with people and vehicles, and natural scenes.

Errors: 'taking tall buildings' should be 'photographing' or 'taking pictures of'; 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds'; parallel structure improved by listing objects consistently. Suggestion: use parallel noun phrases and correct plural form 'kinds'.

× There's really a challenging 1. Thank you for me on my own thought and opinions.

✓ That's a challenging question. Thank you for asking my thoughts and opinions.

The original is confused: 'There's really a challenging 1' likely meant 'That's a challenging one/question' and 'Thank you for me on my own thought' is incorrect. 'Question' is countable singular; use 'That's a challenging question' or 'a challenging one'. 'Thank you for asking my thoughts' expresses gratitude correctly. Suggestion: use correct nouns and verb forms.

× Here in my country, it is a tropical country filled with beaches and crystal blue beaches.

✓ Here in my country, it is tropical and filled with crystal-blue beaches.

Redundant repetition 'beaches and crystal blue beaches' is incorrect. Use hyphenated adjective 'crystal-blue' before 'beaches' and avoid repeating 'country' twice. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use correct adjective form.

× On the other country it is filled with different kinds of geographic places.

✓ In other countries, there are many different kinds of geographic features.

Errors: 'On the other country' incorrect preposition and article; should be 'in other countries' or 'in the other country'. 'Geographic places' is odd; 'geographic features' or 'landscapes' is better. Also use plural agreement 'there are many'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'in' and choose appropriate noun 'features/landscapes'.