Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然但不够完整，存在句子不完整及词汇使用不当的问题。建议：①修正不完整句子并用一到两句具体补充细节；②使用连接词提高连贯性（例如"because", "for example", "and"）；③用更准确的形容词描述光线和颜色（例如"vibrant", "soft"）。练习时注意控制在不超过5句内。

例: Yes, I love taking pictures when I travel because photography helps me capture memories of beautiful landscapes. For example, I especially enjoy seaside towns where the light is soft at sunset and the colors are very vibrant, which makes the photos quite dramatic.

提案: 回答清晰表达了偏好，但存在语法小错误和重复。建议：①修正语法（例如使用完整句子："The countryside is so peaceful with fresh air and beautiful views"）；②用一两个具体细节说明为什么能放松（例如活动或声音）；③使用连接词如"because"和"so"使逻辑更紧密。

例: I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery helps me relax. The countryside is peaceful with fresh air and birdsong, so I can go hiking or read by a river and feel much calmer than in the busy city.

提案: 回答表达了偏好但句子有断裂、语法错误（如"animals lives"）和不完整结尾。建议：①改正语法错误并完成句子；②增加具体例子说明哪些动物或景点；③使用连接词如"for example"或"because"补充原因，回答控制在3-4句内。

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many mountains and dense forests full of wildlife. For example, I often see deer and many kinds of birds in the national parks, so visiting these places feels very peaceful and familiar.

× I especially enjoy seaside towns where the light and colors often particularly.

✓ I especially enjoy seaside towns where the light and colors are particularly beautiful.

原句中“often particularly”两个副词连用，但缺少被修饰的形容词或系动词短语，导致句子不完整且语义不明。应使用系动词“are”并加上形容词“beautiful”来完整表达“光线和色彩特别美”。建议：当用副词修饰时，确保后面有可被修饰的形容词或动词短语；不要随意堆叠副词。

× The countryside is so peaceful when fresh air and beautiful views, so I feel more at ease than in the busy city.

✓ The countryside is so peaceful with fresh air and beautiful views, so I feel more at ease than in the busy city.

原句中“when fresh air and beautiful views”结构不符合时态或连词用法，应该使用介词短语“with …”来描述伴随状态。“when”用于时间状语，但此处想表达伴随特征，所以用“with”。建议：描述某地的特点时，多用“with + 名词短语”。

× I prefer views in my own country because my country has more mountains and forests and so many animals lives in there.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country has more mountains and forests and so many animals live there.

原句中“animals lives”主语为复数“animals”而动词却用了第三人称单数形式“lives”，这是主谓不一致（亦属于动词形式错误）。此外“in there”多余，常用“there”或“in my country”。建议：复数主语后动词用原形（不加 -s）；地点副词用法选择其一，例如“live there”或“live in my country”。

× I think it's so peaceful and.

✓ I think it's so peaceful and calming.

原句以“and”结尾，句子不完整，缺少并列成分。需要在“and”后补充与“peaceful”并列的形容词或名词短语来完成句子。建议：写句子时避免以连接词结束，检查并列结构是否完整。