Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and include specific details with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., 'phrase'). Use plural/singular correctly and name places clearly. Aim for 2–4 complete sentences with linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because each place offers unique scenery. For example, where I live in Meguro the cherry blossoms are spectacular in spring, so I often go to the park to take photos.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and clear supporting details; correct pronunciation errors (e.g., 'our ears' should be 'urban areas') and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain reasons (e.g., 'because', 'as'). Include concrete examples of what you like about urban views.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy architectural details and city life. For example, I like photographing modern buildings, busy streets, and the contrast between old and new structures.

提案: Answer directly, fix grammar (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries'), and avoid filler words ('I I', 'wanna'). Provide specific reasons and examples using linking words like 'because' and 'for instance.' Mention what kinds of places you want to see abroad.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to discover landscapes and cultures that are different from Japan. For instance, I would love to photograph the colorful markets in Morocco or the vast deserts in Australia because they offer scenery I can't find at home.

× I enjoy taking picture of different views I want to see because I want see a different beautiful phrase.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views I want to see because I want to see different beautiful places.

Singular and plural issue: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'different views' implies more than one picture. Also 'phrase' is the wrong word; the intended word is 'places'. Missing 'to' after 'want' in 'want to see'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items, choose correct vocabulary ('place' not 'phrase'), and include 'to' after 'want' for the infinitive.

× Like for example I'm living in ***** and Megro is famous for Sakura in this season so it's beautiful.

✓ For example, I live in ***** and Meguro is famous for sakura in this season, so it's beautiful.

Incorrect use of prepositions and tense: 'living in' can be simplified to present simple 'I live' for a general fact. 'Megro' is corrected to 'Meguro' (spelling). 'Famous for Sakura'—use lowercase 'sakura' unless capitalized as a proper noun; keep 'in this season' is acceptable but better 'in this season' or 'at this time of year'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual facts and correct place names and prepositions.

× I prefer take picture of our ears because.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of urban areas because.

Verb + -ing form and singular/plural issues: After 'prefer' use the gerund 'taking' not the base verb 'take'. 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'different views'. 'our ears' appears to be a phonetic or spelling error for 'urban areas'. Suggestion: use 'prefer taking pictures of urban areas' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× I'm interested interested in the buildings and the COM complex.

✓ I'm interested in the buildings and the commercial complex.

Sentence structure and word choice: 'interested interested' is a repetition error. 'COM complex' seems unclear; likely 'commercial complex' fits. Suggestion: remove repeated words and use clear vocabulary.

× I prefer in other countries because. I I wanna see other beautiful place in other countries and it doesn't have in Japan.

✓ I prefer other countries because I want to see beautiful places that we don't have in Japan.

Sentence structure and verb tense: 'I prefer in other countries' should be 'I prefer other countries'. 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'place' should be plural 'places' when referring to multiple locations. 'it doesn't have in Japan' is incorrect subject/verb and pronoun; use 'that we don't have in Japan' or 'that are not in Japan'. Suggestion: use standard forms ('want to'), correct plural nouns, and proper relative clauses ('that we don't have in Japan').