Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, why you like it and where you usually take photos). Also keep answers to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking landscape photos. For example, I often explore mountains and hilly areas because I love the peaceful atmosphere and dramatic scenery, so I try to capture sunrise and wide views when I have time.

提案: Improve coherence and grammar: begin with a direct statement of preference, then use a linking word to add reasons. Use more precise vocabulary (pollution, man-made structures) and avoid long, run-on sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of natural scenery. In contrast, urban areas often have pollution and many man-made structures, which makes them feel less tranquil.

提案: Correct grammar and factual phrasing, and avoid overlong or unclear sentences. Start with a clear statement, then give specific reasons with linking words. Be careful with superlatives and facts (e.g., 'second richest country in water' is unclear); instead describe what you mean (many mountains, lakes, greenery).

例: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has stunning mountain scenery, including Mount Everest, as well as many lakes and green valleys. For these reasons I find domestic landscapes more impressive and familiar than those abroad.

× When I got a time I explored the nature and mountains and all the hills areas.

✓ When I get time, I explore nature, mountains, and hilly areas.

The original mixes past and habitual meaning; 'got a time' is incorrect for 'have free time.' Use present simple 'get' for habitual actions. 'Explored' (past) conflicts with general habit. 'the nature' and 'all the hills areas' are unidiomatic; use 'nature' and 'hilly areas'. Add commas for clarity and use plural 'hilly areas' to match meaning.

× So I basically love photography and I love taking pictures of anything I see in front of me.

✓ So I basically love photography, and I love taking pictures of anything I see.

The phrase 'in front of me' is redundant after 'see.' It's grammatical but stylistically unnecessary. Keep present simple 'love' for habitual preference. Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× I prefer views in rural areas where there is peace, calm and more scenery in the natural way and in urban area there are lots of pollutions and artificial things that are not feel like the rural area natural things.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas, where there is peace, calm, and more natural scenery. In urban areas there is a lot of pollution and artificial things that do not feel like the natural features of rural areas.

Several preposition and article errors: use 'in rural areas' and 'in urban areas' (plural). 'Scenery in the natural way' is incorrect; use 'natural scenery.' 'Pollutions' should be uncountable 'pollution.' 'Are not feel like' is wrong verb form and structure; use 'do not feel like' or better 'do not resemble.' Clarify 'natural features of rural areas' to be idiomatic.

× Is my country is popular for natural things so I prefer the views of my country rather than in other country.

✓ My country is popular for its natural features, so I prefer the views in my country to those in other countries.

The original begins with an extraneous 'Is' and repeats 'is'. Remove the extra verb. Use 'popular for its natural features' for clarity. Use 'prefer X to Y' structure and plural 'other countries' for general comparison. Replace 'the views of my country rather than in other country' with idiomatic phrasing.

× Our country is rich in the world highest Mount Everest and also the second richest country in the water and mountains and greenery natural scenario so I prefer Nepal.

✓ Our country is home to the world's highest mountain, Mount Everest, and is also rich in water, mountains, and greenery, so I prefer Nepal.

Errors in adjective forms and word order: 'the world highest Mount Everest' should be 'the world's highest mountain, Mount Everest.' 'Second richest country in the water' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'rich in water' is clearer. 'Greenery natural scenario' is unidiomatic—use 'greenery.' Combine ideas with commas and keep consistent present simple. Also specify 'I prefer Nepal' at end for clarity.