Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rõ ràng nhưng cần rút gọn, chính xác hơn và tránh liệt kê dài dòng. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể kèm liên từ để nối ý (ví dụ: because, for example). Tránh lặp từ như “beautiful places” nhiều lần và giữ tối đa 5 câu.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially mountains and lakes, because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph a lake at sunrise to capture the changing colors.

提案: Ý chính rõ nhưng diễn đạt lặp và thiếu mạch lạc. Hãy nói một câu chủ đề ngắn nêu sở thích, rồi giải thích lý do bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “emotional and emotions”) và dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, which).

例: I prefer rural views because I grew up there and feel more relaxed in the countryside. The quiet environment and fresh air improve my mood and mental well-being.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, lặp từ và cấu trúc rời rạc. Nên trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích lý do cụ thể (về cảnh, văn hóa, kỷ niệm) và tránh các cụm từ mơ hồ như “no countries in the world is same”. Giữ tối đa 2-3 câu rõ ràng.

例: I prefer views in Vietnam because the landscapes and cultural scenes feel familiar and meaningful to me. For instance, I love photographing traditional rice terraces and busy street markets that remind me of home.

× Well, I like taking pictures of different views such as skyscrapers, mountains, lake because I can keep the memories of the beautiful places.

✓ Well, I like taking pictures of different views such as skyscrapers, mountains, and lakes because I can keep memories of beautiful places.

The list of nouns requires plural consistency and correct conjunctions: 'lake' should be plural 'lakes' to match 'skyscrapers, mountains'; add 'and' before the last item. Also 'keep the memories of the beautiful places' is wordy and unnatural; 'keep memories of beautiful places' is more natural. Use of 'taking' is correct (verb + -ing after 'like').

× I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up there and I feel rural areas brings me a good emotional and emotions and good health, good mental health.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up there and I feel rural areas bring me good emotions and good mental health.

Subject-verb agreement: 'rural areas' is plural so the verb should be 'bring' not 'brings'. 'A good emotional and emotions' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'good emotions' or 'positive emotions'. Also streamline 'good health, good mental health' to avoid repetition; here 'good mental health' is sufficient. Use of 'feel' with noun phrase is correct.

× Of course, I prefer views in Vietnam because I am Vietnamese and no countries in the world. Is same as same as Vietnam I.

✓ Of course, I prefer views in Vietnam because I am Vietnamese and no other country in the world is the same as Vietnam.

The original contains fragmented and repeated phrases and incorrect word order. 'No countries in the world. Is same as same as Vietnam I.' should be combined and rearranged: 'no other country in the world is the same as Vietnam.' Place subject before verb and include 'other' to mean 'any other country'. Ensure a single coherent sentence.