Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và mạch lạc: tránh lặp từ và ngắt quãng, sửa lỗi cấu trúc (ví dụ “take pictures of different views” — không cần lặp), thêm câu chủ đề rõ ràng và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Luyện phát âm các từ như “scenery” và kết hợp liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like capturing landscapes and city skylines when I travel, because they remind me of the atmosphere of each place. I often post my best shots on social media to share them with friends.

提案: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, dùng câu trả lời trực tiếp theo quy tắc: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do với chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh dùng những từ không đúng như “refer” hay “group stop”; thay bằng “prefer” và cụm từ phù hợp như “bus stops” hoặc “landmarks”.

例: I prefer views in urban areas. I enjoy looking at tall buildings and famous landmarks, and I like walking around busy squares and visiting observation towers to get a panoramic view of the city.

提案: Làm rõ ý và sửa lỗi từ vựng/giải thích: dùng “prefer” thay cho “refer”, sửa các từ sai như “scanning sport” và “Selfies mall”. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi nêu lý do cụ thể kèm ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm hoặc hoạt động. Tránh câu không hợp lý như “setting a roof”.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to the culture and familiar places. For example, I like visiting local parks and historic districts with friends, where we can relax and take photos of traditional architecture.

× I really like taking pictures in different views because I, I can take a of our different, a different, uh, scenery in more places and I can show it in social media for my friend.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views because I can capture various sceneries in many places and share them on social media with my friends.

The original sentence has redundant words, wrong word order and missing/misused nouns ('a of our different'), and incorrect prepositions ('in social media for my friend'). Reconstruct the sentence to use correct verbs (capture, share), correct prepositions (of views, on social media, with my friends), correct plural forms (sceneries, friends), and remove filler words for clarity. Use parallel structure ('capture... and share...').

× I refer fill in urban area then rural area because I love a lot of building and in urban area I can go to the group stop and sightseeing around the the tower.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural areas because I love many buildings, and in urban areas I can go to bus stops and sightsee around the towers.

Errors include wrong verb choice ('refer' should be 'prefer'), wrong preposition/order ('prefer X to Y'), singular/plural mismatches ('a lot of building' -> many buildings), incorrect nouns ('group stop' likely 'bus stop'), and wrong gerund usage ('sightseeing' -> 'sightsee' after 'can'). Also use plural 'urban areas' and 'towers' to match general reference. Ensure correct prepositions and verb forms for natural English.

× I refer the view in my own country because I feel a strong connection to the places and cultures.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to the places and the culture.

Use 'prefer' not 'refer'. Use plural 'views' to match context. 'Cultures' can be used, but 'the culture' or 'the cultures' must match meaning; here 'the places and the culture' is more natural. Also use correct article 'the' before 'views' and 'culture' for specificity.

× For example, I enjoy visiting familiar scanning sport and hanging out at local Selfies mall with friends.

✓ For example, I enjoy visiting familiar sightseeing spots and hanging out at local malls with friends.

Many incorrect words: 'scanning sport' should be 'sightseeing spots', 'Selfies mall' is incorrect -> 'local malls'. Use plural 'malls' if general, and parallel gerund forms 'visiting' and 'hanging out' are fine. Correct vocabulary and spelling are necessary for clarity.

× We feel more comfortable than setting a roof.

✓ We feel more comfortable than when we are abroad.

Original phrase 'setting a roof' is meaningless here. Likely intended contrast between feeling at home in own country versus abroad. Rephrase to a clear comparative clause: 'more comfortable than when we are abroad.' Use complete clause with verb to avoid sentence fragment.