Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency and reduce repetition; make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct pronunciation of words like "especially" and plural forms ("these pictures").

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy taking photos of people, such as my friends, because it feels like capturing memories with them. For example, when I feel bored or lonely, I look back at these photos to remember good times and cheer myself up.

提案: Make the answer more concise and varied in vocabulary; avoid repeating words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "therefore" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in a busy capital city in Taiwan and urban scenes are familiar to me. Therefore, when I visit the countryside I take many landscape photos, such as rice terraces and mountain sunsets.

提案: Clarify and finish your thoughts; avoid vague phrases and repetition. Begin with a clear statement, give a specific reason and an example, and finish the sentence logically. Use correct grammar ("other countries", "recently travelled").

例: I prefer views in other countries. Recently, while travelling around Europe, I took many photos and videos because the scenery and culture were new to me, which made the experience exciting and memorable.

× Yes I do. I specially prefer to take pictures of people like my friends, because taking pictures is like saving memories with them.

✓ Yes, I do. I especially prefer to take pictures of people, like my friends, because taking pictures is like saving memories with them.

The speaker used 'specially' but the correct adverb is 'especially' when emphasizing preference. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'especially' to highlight particular preference; include commas around the example phrase 'like my friends'.

× And sometimes when I feel boring and I feel lonely, I can take this.

✓ And sometimes when I feel bored and lonely, I can do this.

'Boring' describes something that causes boredom; 'bored' describes a person's feeling. Use the adjective 'bored' for the speaker. 'Take this' is unclear in context; 'do this' (meaning 'take photos') is clearer. Suggestion: use 'bored' and streamline the clause to 'bored and lonely'.

× I can, I can, I can watch, look at this pictures to remember.

✓ I can look at these pictures to remember.

'This pictures' mixes singular demonstrative 'this' with plural noun; use plural demonstrative 'these'. Redundant verbs 'watch, look' and repeated 'I can' should be reduced for fluency. Suggestion: say 'I can look at these pictures to remember'.

× For me, I prefer views in rural areas because I live in an urban city like capital city in Taiwan.

✓ For me, I prefer views in rural areas because I live in an urban city, like the capital city of Taiwan.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'capital city' and missing preposition 'of' for possession. Also add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the capital city of Taiwan' when referring to a specific city.

× So urban area urban views are quite familiar for me.

✓ So urban areas and urban views are quite familiar to me.

Repetition 'urban area urban views' is awkward; restructure to 'urban areas and urban views'. Use preposition 'to' with 'familiar' (familiar to someone). Suggestion: simplify and correct preposition: 'familiar to me'.

× So when I go to a rural area, I will take a lot of photos of the landscape.

✓ So when I go to a rural area, I take a lot of photos of the landscape.

When talking about habitual actions in general contexts, the simple present 'I take' is more natural than 'I will take'. Use simple present to express regular behavior. Suggestion: use 'I take a lot of photos' for habitual action.

× From my perspective, I prefer the views in other country.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer the views in another country.

'Other country' is uncountable or incorrect here; use 'another country' when referring to one additional country. Suggestion: use 'another' for singular alternative, or 'other countries' for plural.

× As I am recently traveling around Europe, I'd like to take a lot of photos and videos about this new country because I am quite unfamiliar with this and this is quite new for me and makes me.

✓ As I have been traveling around Europe recently, I'd like to take a lot of photos and videos of the new countries because I am quite unfamiliar with them and they feel new to me.

'I am recently traveling' is awkward; use present perfect progressive 'have been traveling' for recent continuous actions. 'Photos and videos about this new country' should be 'of the new countries' (or 'of this new country') and match number with pronouns. The clause 'and makes me' is incomplete and unclear; replace with 'and they feel new to me.' Suggestion: use consistent tense (present perfect continuous) and agreement in number for nouns and pronouns; express the feeling clearly.