Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct basic grammar (pluralization, articles). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. Avoid repetition of the phrase "taking picture(s)". Use varied vocabulary such as "capture" or "photograph."

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it's a great way to preserve memories. For example, when I travel I often capture landmarks and natural landscapes so I can remember the trip later.

提案: Provide a single clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (use plural/singular correctly) and avoid informal fillers like 'kinda' or repeating words. Combine short fragments into complete sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I currently live in a busy city. For instance, the countryside offers peaceful scenery and open spaces, which help me relax after a hectic week.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason using linking words. Correct pronunciation/grammar mistakes (avoid double words like 'I I' and use proper articles/plurals). Add one concrete example or contrast to make the response more persuasive.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I have lived here for most of my life and want new experiences. For example, visiting a different country lets me see unfamiliar landscapes and cultures, which feels refreshing.

× I like taking picture because taking picture is one of the best way to preserve memories, good memories.

✓ I like taking pictures because taking pictures are one of the best ways to preserve memories, good memories.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') when referring to the activity in general. Also 'one of the best way' is incorrect: 'one of the' requires a plural noun after 'best' ('ways'), and the verb must agree with the plural subject ('pictures are'). Suggestion: use 'taking pictures' and 'one of the best ways'.

× So for example, when I go to travel, I take a pictures of landmark or natural landscapes.

✓ So, for example, when I go traveling, I take pictures of landmarks or natural landscapes.

Use plural 'pictures' and plural 'landmarks' when referring to such things in general. Also 'go to travel' is unnatural; use 'go traveling' or 'travel'. Suggestion: 'when I go traveling, I take pictures of landmarks or natural landscapes.'

× I prefer view in rural areas 'cause now I'm living in the city so I'm kinda tired.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I'm living in the city now, so I'm kind of tired.

'View' should be plural ('views') when speaking generally. Word order improved: 'because I'm living in the city now' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'views' and place time adverb appropriately.

× Tired of this busy environment and high buildings.

✓ I'm tired of this busy environment and the tall buildings.

The original fragment lacks a subject and verb, so it reads like a fragment; also 'high buildings' is better as 'tall buildings' (adjective choice). Added subject 'I'm' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: include 'I'm' and use 'tall' for buildings.

× And I really like the peaceful.

✓ And I really like the peacefulness.

'Peaceful' is an adjective and cannot stand alone as a noun here. Use the noun 'peacefulness' or say 'I really like the peace.' Suggestion: use 'peacefulness' or 'peace'.

× I prefer view in other country because I I live here most of my most of my life so I'm kind of tired of this.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have lived here for most of my life, so I'm kind of tired of it.

Multiple issues fixed while adhering to allowed types: 'view' -> 'views' and 'other country' -> 'other countries' for general preference. Also 'I I' is a repetition; 'have lived here for most of my life' expresses duration correctly (present perfect). 'Tired of this' -> 'tired of it' is more natural. Suggestion: use plurals for general statements and present perfect for life experience.