Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and limit to 2–3 supporting details. Use linking words if adding reasons. Be specific about what you like photographing and why.

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural landscapes because they change with light and seasons. For example, I like capturing sunrise over a lake to record the colors and atmosphere.

提案: Answer directly which you prefer and give 1–2 clear reasons using linking words (e.g., however, whereas, because). Avoid vague words like 'maybe' and reduce repetition. Provide a specific example to support your preference.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer peaceful natural scenes and wildlife, whereas urban views show busy streets and architecture. For instance, I enjoy photographing quiet country fields at dawn because they feel calm and authentic.

提案: Give a direct preference or say you enjoy both with distinct reasons. Fix grammar (e.g., 'both sceneries are' → 'both types of scenery are'). Use linking words to compare and provide a specific example of each to make your answer concrete.

例: I enjoy both, but I prefer views in other countries for their cultural variety and unexpected scenes. For example, photographing street markets abroad shows different colors and life, while photographing my country lets me capture familiar landscapes and traditions.

× Yes, to be honest, I am a person who really like nature and like to bring my cell to record every beautiful scenery in the moment.

✓ Yes, to be honest, I am a person who really likes nature and likes to bring my phone to record every beautiful scene in the moment.

The relative clause 'who really like' refers to 'a person' (singular), so the verb must be 'likes' (subject-verb agreement). Similarly, 'like to bring my cell' should be 'likes to bring my phone' to match the singular subject. 'Cell' is informal; 'phone' and 'scenery' as an uncountable noun is fine but 'every beautiful scenery' should be 'every beautiful scene' because 'every' requires a countable noun. Suggest using 'likes' for third-person singular and 'phone' and 'scene' for natural collocation.

× I think a rural area and urban areas scenery is totally different. Maybe in the urban area you can see how convenient in the city and maybe in rural area you can see lots of nature and animals.

✓ I think rural and urban scenery are totally different. In urban areas you can see how convenient city life is, and in rural areas you can see lots of nature and animals.

Original has article and number mismatches and awkward structure. 'a rural area and urban areas scenery' is ungrammatical—use 'rural and urban scenery' (general concept). 'Scenery' is uncountable so pair with plural verb 'are'. Use plural 'areas' consistently: 'in urban areas' and 'in rural areas'. 'how convenient in the city' lacks a verb—correct to 'how convenient city life is'. These changes fix article use, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure.

× To be honest, I consider both of the sceneries are very significant and magnificent for me, so I can choose which one is my my choice.

✓ To be honest, I consider both sceneries very significant and magnificent to me, so I cannot choose which one is my choice.

The phrase 'consider both of the sceneries are' mixes two structures ('consider X to be' or 'X are'). Use 'I consider both sceneries very significant' or 'I consider both sceneries to be...'. 'Sceneries' is awkward; 'scenery' is usually uncountable, but 'both sceneries' is acceptable in spoken English to mean 'the two kinds of scenery'. The original 'so I can choose which one is my my choice' is illogical—should be 'so I cannot choose which one is my choice' if meaning both are equally good. Also remove duplicate 'my'. These edits correct sentence structure and logical meaning.