Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but has some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to make one concise topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. In English (Japan): 「最初に簡潔に答え、次に接続語（for example, so, because）を使って具体例を1〜2つ入れてください。繰り返し（I want to show / enjoy together / share）を避け、文法を簡潔に整えましょう。」

例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me share my experiences with friends and remember trips. For example, I often photograph landscapes when I travel so I can show where I went and talk about the memories later.

提案: Good direct answer and clear preference, but wording is repetitive and some grammar needs fixing (singular/plural, articles). Use linking words to contrast and give a specific reason or example. In English (Japan): 「好みを最初に述べ、次に対比の接続詞（however, although）を使い理由や具体例を1つ示してください。'rural area'は通常複数形や冠詞が必要です（the countryside, rural areas）。」

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy peaceful natural scenery and quiet walks. Although cities have interesting attractions, I usually choose the countryside for relaxation and photography.

提案: You answer directly and give an example, but there is hesitation and vague phrasing ("special mood"). Make sentences smoother, avoid filler words, and give a specific reason with one clear example. In English (Japan): 「まず『I prefer』で始め、ためらい言葉（uh）を避けてください。'special mood'は具体的に説明（traditional atmosphere, historic architecture）し、京都のどんな場所や建物が好きか一つ挙げましょう。」

例: I prefer views in my own country because Japan has a unique traditional atmosphere and well-preserved cultural sites. For example, when I visit Kyoto I especially enjoy the historic temples and traditional wooden streets, which create a memorable view.

× Yes, I like taking pictures because I'm I want to show my visit to other people and enjoy together, share my memories with my friends and that's why I like taking pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because I want to show my visits to other people, share my memories with my friends, and enjoy those moments together.

The original sentence has redundancy ('I'm I want'), run-on structure, and incorrect noun number. Remove the extra 'I'm', use plural 'visits' to match repeated experiences, and connect clauses with commas and 'and' to form a clear coordinated sentence. Suggest practicing making concise compound sentences by using conjunctions and parallel structure.

× I prefer views in rural area because I like visiting rural area and quiet area.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I like visiting rural and quiet places.

Singular 'rural area' is inconsistent when speaking generally; use plural 'rural areas' or 'the countryside.' Also 'quiet area' should be plural or replaced with 'quiet places' to match general preference. Use consistent plural nouns for general statements.

× Though I know urban area has good place to visit, I prefer to see nature.

✓ Though I know urban areas have good places to visit, I prefer to see nature.

Countable nouns require articles or plurals. 'Urban area' and 'good place' are countable; when speaking generally, use plurals 'urban areas' and 'places.' This fixes agreement and sounds natural. Alternatively, use 'the urban area' and 'a good place' if referring to specific ones.

× I prefer views and my country because our country has a special mood, especially Japanese culture.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it has a special atmosphere, especially due to Japanese culture.

The phrase 'prefer views and my country' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'prefer views in my country.' 'Special mood' is better expressed as 'special atmosphere.' Clarify reference with 'it' and add 'due to' to link cause. Practice replacing vague nouns with clearer alternatives.

× When I visit Kyoto, I enjoyed Kyoto's, uh, Kyoto's area especially.

✓ When I visited Kyoto, I especially enjoyed the Kyoto area.

Tense and repetition issues: use past tense 'visited' and avoid repeating 'Kyoto's.' Place 'especially' before the verb phrase for natural emphasis. Remove filler 'uh.' Practice concise past-tense statements and avoid repetition.

× They have the cultural buildings.

✓ It has many cultural buildings.

Pronoun 'They' has unclear antecedent; refer to 'Kyoto' (singular) with 'it.' Also use 'many' to indicate plurality of buildings. Ensure pronouns clearly match their nouns and number.