Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn; dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "maybe forgot" → "might have forgotten"). Sử dụng từ nối để mạch lạc (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember moments I might have otherwise forgotten. For example, a picture of a street market can bring back the sounds and smells of that day, so I often take several shots to capture the atmosphere.

提案: Cải thiện: Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng (uh, umm) và sửa ngữ pháp ("rural area" → "rural areas"; "something is simple and very natural" → "something simpler and more natural"). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để kết nối ý.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel simpler and more natural to me. For instance, rolling hills and small farms are calming after seeing many tall buildings in the city, so I often choose countryside scenes when I take photos.

提案: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và ngập ngừng; sửa ngữ pháp ("my country's views are very beautiful"). Hãy cụ thể hơn: nêu hai ba loại cảnh và một lý do tại sao bạn ưa thích chúng. Giữ câu ngắn gọn và mạch lạc, tối đa 4-5 câu.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because they are very diverse and beautiful. For example, we have stunning beaches with clear water and high mountains with scenic trails, so I often enjoy visiting different regions to experience that variety.

× I prefer taking different pictures of different views because when I see the pictures again it reminds me about the memory that I maybe forgot and I'd like to see.

✓ I prefer taking different pictures of various views because when I see the pictures again they remind me of memories that I might have forgotten and I'd like to look at them.

Sử dụng đại từ không khớp: 'it reminds me' should be 'they remind me' to agree with plural 'pictures'. 'about the memory' is unnatural; use 'of memories'. 'maybe forgot' is incorrect tense/word order; use 'might have forgotten'. Also 'like to see' -> 'like to look at them' for clarity.

× Uh, from my point of view, I like uh views in uh, rural area more because maybe I have seen many tall building and skyscraper so I prefer something is simple and uh, very and umm, natural.

✓ From my point of view, I like views in rural areas more because I have seen many tall buildings and skyscrapers, so I prefer something simple and very natural.

Số ít/số nhiều: 'rural area' should be 'rural areas' to match plural 'views'. 'many tall building and skyscraper' must be plural: 'many tall buildings and skyscrapers'. 'something is simple' is incorrect structure; use 'something simple'. Removed filler words for clarity.

× For me, my, uh, country's views is very like beautiful because my country has a lot of different kind of, uh, different kind of views like, and different kinds of place, places like beach, uh, mountain, something like that.

✓ For me, my country's views are very beautiful because my country has a lot of different kinds of places, like beaches and mountains.

Đại từ và động từ không phù hợp: 'country's views is' should be 'country's views are' to match plural subject. 'different kind of' should be plural 'different kinds of'. 'places like beach, mountain' needs plural nouns 'beaches and mountains' and cleaner structure.