Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁连贯，避免重复和语法错误，并补充具体细节说明你拍照的原因或情境。可用一到两句陈述主题，再用一两句具体例子支持，句子总数不超过五句。注意使用连接词如“because, so, for example”。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I often forget small details of places. For example, I visit the Old Town regularly and take shots of its narrow streets and colorful facades so I can remember the atmosphere later.

提案: 回答总体清晰，但注意时态与词序（例如“I have lived here for many years”），并增加更具体的对比细节说明为什么喜欢城市景观。使用连接词如“because, for example, also”使语意更连贯。

例: I prefer urban areas because I have lived in the city for many years and enjoy its variety of sights and activities. For example, I like walking to a nearby park with friends to see street art, cafes and busy markets, which makes me feel happy.

提案: 回答存在明显语法和表达问题，要用更准确的句子表达偏好并给出具体原因或例子。先直接回答问题，然后用一到两句说明原因（如想体验不同文化、学习新事物），避免口头禅（uh）和句子残缺。

例: I prefer views in other countries, such as the United States, because I want to experience different cultures and landscapes. For example, seeing American national parks and city skylines would help me learn new things and broaden my perspective.

× I don't always remember the beautiful things, so I should I should take photos to keep my memory.

✓ I don't always remember beautiful things, so I should take photos to keep my memories.

句子中重复了“I should”，应删除重复部分。此外“the beautiful things”在此语境中不需要定冠词，改为复数名词“beautiful things”。“memory”在此处指回忆应使用复数“memories”。建议：避免重复表达，通常谈论回忆用复数形式。

× For example, I often visit an Old Town.

✓ For example, I often visit the old town.

“Old Town”作为普通名词短语不应首字母大写，且如果指特定的老城区需用定冠词“the”。句子结构本身可保留，注意大小写和冠词用法。

× I also I also progress the.

✓ I also make progress.

原句有重复且不完整。“progress”用作不可数名词或不及物动词时不需要宾语，常用短语“make progress”表示取得进步。建议说完整短语并避免重复。

× I prefer urban areas because I lived here long years.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I have lived here for many years.

表述现在仍然居住的情况应使用现在完成时“have lived”，并用“for many years”表示时间段。原句使用过去式“lived”会暗示不再居住。

× I always enjoy the variety of it.

✓ I always enjoy the variety here.

代词“it”在此处不够明确，应使用地点副词“here”或指代“urban areas”的表达。建议使用更明确的指代词以提高表达清晰度。

× For example, when I walk with my friends to a nearby park, I feel happy.

✓ For example, when I walk with my friends to a nearby park, I feel happy.

该句语法正确。保持现在时描述经常发生的动作是合适的。

× I prefer views is another country, for example, America, because my, uh, is outside.

✓ I prefer views in another country, for example America, because my family is abroad.

原句中“is”位置错误且代词不明确。应使用介词“in”表示地点“in another country”。“my, uh, is outside”不完整，推测为“my family is abroad/overseas”。建议用具体名词来代替含糊的代词。

× I want to try to another new things to, uh, reach myself, enrich myself.

✓ I want to try new things to challenge myself and enrich myself.

“try to another new things”结构错误。应使用“try new things”或“try something new”。“reach myself”不恰当，意为挑战自我可用“challenge myself”。使用并列不定式时要平行（to challenge myself and to enrich myself）或省略重复的“to”。建议使用固定搭配并保持平行结构。

× Uh, it's not.

✓ Uh, it's not true.

原句不完整，缺乏补充信息。“it's not”后面需要补充内容，比如“true”或“very common”等，使句子完整明确。