Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms and add a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I find photography very relaxing, and it helps me notice small details in my surroundings. For example, I enjoy capturing the light on buildings at sunset because it changes the mood of a scene.

提案: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide one specific example. Avoid repetition and filler sounds.

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes. For instance, I like photographing rivers and mountains since the changing light highlights textures and colors, which makes photos more interesting.

提案: Clarify your opinion with correct grammar and vocabulary. State a clear preference or explain why you can't choose, using linking words and specific details. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., “beautiful wheels,” “goods lands”).

例: It's difficult to choose because both have unique attractions, but if I had to decide I would pick my country, Thailand, because of its diverse beaches and cultural sites. However, I also enjoy photographing landscapes abroad, for example, the dramatic coastlines in Portugal, which offer different colors and light than those at home.

× Absolutely, I do love taking photo and pictures uh as I think is one of the most relaxing hobby.

✓ Absolutely, I do love taking photos, as I think it is one of the most relaxing hobbies.

Errors: 'photo and pictures' mixes singular and plural and is redundant; should use plural 'photos'. 'one of the most relaxing hobby' is incorrect because 'one of the' must be followed by a plural noun, so use 'hobbies'. Also add the pronoun 'it' as the subject for 'is' and remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: say 'taking photos' and 'one of the most relaxing hobbies' to match number agreement and article usage. (Grammar problem type ID: 1 and 22)

× Oh that's good questions.

✓ Oh that's a good question.

Error: 'questions' is plural but the sentence refers to a single question; also needs the article 'a' before 'good question'. Suggestion: use singular 'question' with the article 'a' for correct noun number and article usage. (Grammar problem type ID: 1 and 22)

× I personally like to take a photo.

✓ I personally like to take photos.

Error: 'take a photo' is grammatical but less natural in this context where the student refers to a habit; use plural 'photos' to indicate a general habit of taking pictures. Suggestion: use plural to express repeated action or habit. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× Take photos of rural areas where there is umm beautiful, natural like river, lakes, mountains and countrysides.

✓ I take photos of rural areas where there are beautiful natural features like rivers, lakes, mountains and the countryside.

Errors: 'there is' with a list of multiple items should be 'there are' for plural subjects (subject-verb agreement). 'beautiful, natural like river' is ungrammatical order; use 'beautiful natural features like rivers...' 'countrysides' is incorrect — use the uncountable 'the countryside' or 'countryside areas'. Suggestion: use plural verbs for multiple items, correct noun forms (rivers), and natural word order. (Grammar problem type ID: 27 and 1 and 11)

× I enjoy the environment.

✓ I enjoy the countryside environment.

Error: 'the environment' is vague; while not strictly ungrammatical, specifying 'the countryside environment' fits context and sounds more natural. If keeping general, 'the environment' is acceptable, but context prefers a specific noun. Suggestion: specify which environment to match previous sentence. (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× That's a very tough questions.

✓ That's a very tough question.

Error: 'questions' is plural but refers to a single question; use singular 'question' and include the article 'a'. Suggestion: use correct singular noun with article. (Grammar problem_type_id: 1)

× It's really hard to compare my country umm I'm from Thailand and as you might know my country has one of the most beautiful wheels comparing to other country.

✓ It's really hard to compare my country. I'm from Thailand, and as you might know, my country has some of the most beautiful places compared to other countries.

Errors: Run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation (sentence structure). 'one of the most beautiful wheels' is incorrect word choice; probably 'places' or 'landscapes' is intended. 'comparing to other country' is wrong: use 'compared to other countries' for correct comparative structure and plural noun. Suggestion: split into sentences, choose correct noun ('places' or 'landscapes'), and use 'compared to' plus plural 'countries'. (Grammar problem type ID: 26 and 13 and 19 and 1)

× But I'm I'm not going to be criticized because other country also have different umm goods lands.

✓ But I'm not going to criticize others because other countries also have different, beautiful landscapes.

Errors: Repetition 'I'm I'm' should be single 'I'm'. 'not going to be criticized' changes meaning; likely intended 'I'm not going to criticize others'. 'other country also have' has subject-verb agreement error: 'other countries also have' (plural). 'goods lands' is incorrect collocation; use 'landscapes' or 'scenery'. Suggestion: remove repetition, use active verb 'criticize others', correct plural agreement and choose the proper noun 'landscapes'. (Grammar problem type ID: 20 and 27 and 13 and 1)