Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two specific reasons with linking words. For example, say why you take photos and how you share or keep them.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I take pictures to share interesting scenes with my friends and to keep memories of places I visit, so I often choose shots that capture the atmosphere or special details.

提案: Make the answer more organized and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give two clear reasons using linking words (for example, because, for instance). Be specific (mention mountains, coast, peace) and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing. For example, mountain landscapes and coastal countryside offer fresh air and peaceful scenery, which helps me unwind and focus on details when I take photos.

提案: Clarify and expand with specific reasons and correct grammar. State your preference directly, then give two concrete reasons (e.g., architecture, atmosphere). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'the vibe.'

例: I prefer views in other countries, especially Italy, because the coastal scenery and historic architecture are unique. For instance, seeing the Mediterranean sea and old buildings creates a peaceful atmosphere and gives me interesting subjects to photograph.

× I do like taking pictures of a different views because I wanted to share it to my friends and I wanted to also have a memories as I take a photos every time.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different views because I wanted to share them with my friends and I also wanted to have memories since I take photos all the time.

Errors: 'a different views' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'share it to my friends' uses wrong pronoun and preposition; 'have a memories' uses plural noun with singular article; 'take a photos' uses plural noun with singular article. Correction uses plural nouns without incorrect articles ('different views', 'photos'), correct object pronoun 'them', correct preposition 'with', and removes incorrect article before 'memories'. Suggestion: check noun number (singular/plural) and match articles and pronouns accordingly.

× I do like taking pictures of a different views because I wanted to share it to my friends and I wanted to also have a memories as I take a photos every time.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different views because I wanted to share them with my friends and I also wanted to have memories since I take photos all the time.

Error: tense inconsistency — student uses present 'I do like' and past 'I wanted' in the same context where present perfect or present would be better to express ongoing habit or reason. Revised sentence keeps 'I do like' and changes reasons to past preference could be kept, but better is consistent tense. Suggestion: use present for habitual reasons (e.g., 'I want to share them' or 'I like taking pictures because I want to share them').

× Well, in my opinion, I do prefer the rural area since it was most quiet and relaxed and you can enjoy the view especially when you're in the mountains or like if you're in rural areas like in your seas and aside see the view of this rural area, I felt more relaxing.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I prefer rural areas since they are quieter and more relaxed, and you can enjoy the view, especially when you're in the mountains or by the sea; seeing the view of these rural areas makes me feel more relaxed.

Errors: 'I do prefer the rural area' uses singular 'area' but general meaning requires plural 'areas'; 'it was most quiet and relaxed' mixes past tense and incorrect comparative form; 'in your seas and aside see' is ungrammatical preposition use and wording; 'I felt more relaxing' uses wrong tense and adjective/adverb ('relaxing' describes causing relaxation, while 'relaxed' describes feeling). Corrections: use present tense 'prefer', plural 'areas', comparative 'quieter', 'more relaxed', prepositions 'by the sea' and 'seeing... makes me feel more relaxed'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for general preferences and use correct adjective/adverb forms.

× Well, in my opinion, I do prefer the rural area since it was most quiet and relaxed and you can enjoy the view especially when you're in the mountains or like if you're in rural areas like in your seas and aside see the view of this rural area, I felt more relaxing.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I prefer rural areas since they are quieter and more relaxed, and you can enjoy the view, especially when you're in the mountains or by the sea; seeing the view of these rural areas makes me feel more relaxed.

Errors: inconsistent use of singular and plural ('the rural area' vs 'rural areas'); 'mountains' plural is fine but 'your seas' incorrect — should be 'the sea' or 'the seas' depending. Use plural 'areas' when speaking generally. Suggestion: decide if speaking generally (use plural) or about a specific area (use singular) and keep consistent.

× I do like taking pictures of a different views because I wanted to share it to my friends and I wanted to also have a memories as I take a photos every time.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different views because I wanted to share them with my friends and I also wanted to have memories since I take photos all the time.

Errors: 'share it to my friends' uses wrong preposition 'to' and pronoun 'it' — use 'share them with my friends'; 'as I take a photos' uses wrong preposition 'as' and incorrect article — use 'since' or 'because' and 'photos' without 'a'. Suggestion: learn common verb-preposition pairs (share with) and use 'since' or 'because' for reason clauses.

× When you saw an ocean you feel like much peace.

✓ When you see an ocean you feel a lot of peace.

Errors: tense mismatch 'saw' (past) with 'feel' (present) and unnatural quantifier 'much peace' for countable feeling; also pronoun 'you' is okay but maintain tense consistency. Use present tense 'see' and quantifier 'a lot of'. Suggestion: for general statements use simple present and common collocations ('a lot of peace').

× When you saw an ocean you feel like much peace.

✓ When you see an ocean you feel a lot of peace.

Error: 'an ocean' is acceptable but 'much peace' is unidiomatic; 'a lot of peace' fits. Also maintain singular/plural consistency. Suggestion: use natural collocations.

× When you saw an ocean you feel like much peace.

✓ When you see an ocean you feel a lot of peace.

Error: mixing past 'saw' with present 'feel'. For general truths use present tense 'see' and 'feel'. Suggestion: use simple present for general statements.

× Although there are some people gather around to enjoy the scenery of the ocean or like swimming.

✓ Although some people gather to enjoy the ocean scenery or to go swimming.

Errors: missing verb form and awkward phrasing — 'there are some people gather' is ungrammatical; 'or like swimming' is informal. Correction uses proper clause structure 'some people gather to...' and parallels verbs ('to enjoy'/'to go swimming'). Suggestion: ensure clauses have verbs and use parallel structures.

× But I do feel the vibe and also the structures and the houses of the Italy.

✓ But I do feel the vibe and also the architecture and houses of Italy.

Errors: 'the Italy' incorrectly uses definite article with country name; 'structures' is awkward—'architecture' is more natural. Remove 'the' before country names (most) and use appropriate nouns. Suggestion: omit 'the' with most country names and choose natural collocations like 'architecture'.