Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and fix tense and pronoun errors. Use one linking phrase to add a brief reason or example.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photographs of different views because beautiful scenes lift my mood. For example, I often photograph sunsets in my neighborhood park because the colors feel calming.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce redundancy. Use correct noun-verb agreement and combine similar ideas with a linking word. Add a specific detail or brief example to support your preference.

例: I prefer rural views because the scenery is more natural and peaceful, which helps me relax. For instance, I enjoy photographing rice terraces and small streams when I visit the countryside.

提案: Correct tense and word choice, and make the response clearer by using one or two concise sentences. Mention a reason and a simple future intention with proper grammar.

例: So far I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad yet and I know many beautiful spots here. However, I look forward to visiting other countries to discover different landscapes and cultures.

× My favorite habit is taking pictures of different views.

✓ My favorite hobby is taking pictures of different views.

The student used 'habit' which is not incorrect grammatically but is a word-choice issue (lexical). The target list does not include a lexical category, but the sentence contains an unnecessary present participle concern: 'is taking' is correct as a linking verb + present participle but 'habit' should be 'hobby' to sound natural. Suggest replacing 'habit' with 'hobby' to convey preference; keep 'is taking' because 'taking pictures' is a gerund phrase acting as a subject complement. Suggestion: use 'hobby' for naturalness.

× Beautiful and pretty views give me good feelings, so I'm I did like to take pictures.

✓ Beautiful views make me feel good, so I like to take pictures.

The original sentence contains several structural problems: redundant adjectives ('beautiful and pretty'), ungrammatical insertion 'I'm I did', and awkward phrasing 'give me good feelings'. This is a sentence structure error. Correction simplifies adjectives and uses correct verb forms: 'make me feel good' (natural collocation) and present simple 'I like to take pictures' to state a habitual preference. Suggest avoiding redundant adjectives and ensure only one finite verb sequence per clause.

× The beautiful scenery in rural areas are more natural.

✓ The beautiful scenery in rural areas is more natural.

The noun 'scenery' is an uncountable singular noun, so it requires the singular verb 'is' not 'are'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Suggest identifying the head noun ('scenery') and matching the verb number accordingly. Alternative: 'The beautiful sceneries in rural areas are more natural' is possible if using 'sceneries' (less common).

× It makes me feel close to the nature and it makes me feel relaxed.

✓ It makes me feel close to nature and relaxed.

The phrase 'close to the nature' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' with an uncountable noun 'nature'; article use is wrong. This fits 'Incorrect use of the definite article'. Also the clause is wordy and repeats 'it makes me feel'; correction removes the article and reduces redundancy: 'close to nature and relaxed.' Suggest omitting 'the' before 'nature' in general references and avoid repeating the same verb phrase.

× So I also like to take photos of natural views.

✓ So I also like taking photos of natural views.

Both 'like to take' and 'like taking' are grammatically acceptable, but with habitual or general preferences 'like taking' (gerund) is more natural. This falls under guidance about verb + -ing form (present participle/gerund). Suggest using 'like taking' for naturalness when describing hobbies.

× I prefer views in my own country so far because I never go to other countries yet, but I think they have their own charming so I'm looking forward to go to other countries.

✓ So far, I prefer views in my own country because I have never been to other countries yet, but I think other countries have their own charm, so I’m looking forward to going to them.

This sentence has multiple tense and form errors: 'I never go to other countries yet' is incorrect for a past experience — use present perfect 'I have never been to other countries yet.' 'They have their own charming' misuses 'charming' (adjective) instead of the noun 'charm' and 'they' is vague—use 'other countries.' 'Looking forward to go' is incorrect because 'look forward to' must be followed by a gerund: 'going.' These are present tense/tense-aspect and verb-form errors. Suggestions: use present perfect for experiences up to now, use correct noun forms ('charm') and use gerund after 'look forward to.'