Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words for one or two supporting details. Use plural/singular correctly and natural collocations (e.g., "taking pictures", "when I travel").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel with friends or family, I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes because photography is a hobby and it makes me feel excited and creates memories.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use a clear contrast structure (e.g., "I like both, but for different reasons") and include specific examples. Use correct nouns and plural forms (e.g., "buildings", "city monuments") and linking words like "whereas" or "on the other hand."

例: I like both urban and rural views, but for different reasons. Urban areas attract me with impressive buildings and city monuments, whereas rural areas appeal to me for their green fields, forests and mountain scenery.

提案: Respond directly and avoid vague or incorrect phrases. State a clear preference, give specific reasons and use correct grammar. Replace unclear fragments and unnecessary fillers. Mention concrete features (landscapes, culture, architecture) and a linking phrase like "because" to explain why.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has rich natural landscapes and unique cultural scenes. For example, I love photographing terraced hills, snow-capped mountains and traditional festivals to preserve those memories.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views especially when I am traveling in different places with my friends family because it is also kind of hobby in me and I feel fond and excited taking it.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I am traveling to different places with my friends and family because it is also a kind of hobby for me and I feel fond of and excited about taking them.

Errors: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity (singular/plural issue). Missing preposition 'to' after 'traveling' and missing conjunction 'and' between 'friends' and 'family' (preposition/pronoun coordination but fall under plural/structure). 'kind of hobby in me' is incorrect phrasing; use 'a kind of hobby for me'. 'feel fond and excited taking it' needs 'fond of' and 'excited about' and plural 'them' to refer to 'pictures'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking about general activities, include correct prepositions ('to', 'for', 'of', 'about'), and keep pronoun reference consistent with the noun number.

× Yes I do prefer both builds in urban and rural areas because uh in uh as per urban areas the views of umm different buildings and cities monuments attracts me and of rural area the views of greenery, plants, uh, mountains uh attracts.

✓ Yes, I prefer both urban and rural areas because in urban areas the views of different buildings and city monuments attract me, and in rural areas the views of greenery, plants, and mountains attract me.

Errors: 'builds in urban and rural areas' is awkward—use 'urban and rural areas' or 'buildings'. 'as per urban areas' is incorrect prepositional use; use 'in urban areas'. 'cities monuments' should be 'city monuments' (noun phrase order). Verb agreement: 'attracts' should be 'attract' to match plural subject 'views' (subject-verb agreement). 'of rural area' should be 'in rural areas'. Suggestion: use 'in' for locations, ensure noun modifiers are in correct order (city monuments), and match verb form to plural subject.

× Yes, I prefer beauty in my own country as we all know that new Nepal is also rich in natural resources. Calls are. So I prefer watching it and loving it, the culture, the view of my own country and capture it at my for memories.

✓ Yes, I prefer the beauty of my own country, as we all know that Nepal is also rich in natural resources. So I prefer appreciating and loving the culture and views of my country and capturing them for my memories.

Errors: 'prefer beauty in my own country' needs article and preposition correction to 'the beauty of my own country' (article and preposition). 'new Nepal' is unclear; assume 'Nepal'. Sentence 'Calls are.' is non-sense and removed. 'watching it and loving it' is awkward; use 'appreciating and loving' and match objects: 'the culture and views' (plural), so verb 'capturing them' must match plural. 'capture it at my for memories' has incorrect verb form and prepositions; use 'capturing them for my memories'. Suggestion: use definite article 'the' with abstract nouns like 'beauty of', remove unclear fragments, ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents, and use correct prepositions ('for my memories').