Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise by using a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., "I really like taking pictures of different views, especially the sky"). Add a brief reason or example using a linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "for example").

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially the sky, because I enjoy capturing changing colors and cloud formations. For example, I often photograph sunsets to capture the dramatic light and contrast.

提案: Start with a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and avoid short fragments and repeated words. Use linking words to expand your idea (e.g., "because" and "for example") and provide a specific detail or brief comparison to urban views.

例: I prefer rural views because they have more natural scenery and vibrant colors, which make me feel peaceful. For example, I enjoy photographing quiet fields and forests, whereas urban scenes often feel busy and cluttered.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer views in other countries"). Keep it concise and add a specific reason or example using linking words like "because" or "for instance." Avoid repetition ("different kind of a different country").

例: I prefer views in other countries because I haven't traveled much and I find foreign landscapes exciting. For instance, I'd love to photograph coastal villages or mountain ranges abroad to see new architectures and colors.

× Yes, I really like it to take pictures of different views, especially to the sky.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views, especially of the sky.

The verb 'like' followed by an activity should use the gerund form (verb + -ing), not the infinitive with to. Also, use the preposition 'of' to indicate what is being photographed ('of the sky'), and omit 'it' which is unnecessary here. Suggestion: replace 'it to take' with 'taking' and use 'of the sky'.

× I like. Rural the most because it's more nature and the trees and the colors are more, more vibrant and they they give me a sense of peace.

✓ I prefer rural areas the most because there is more nature; the trees and colors are more vibrant and they give me a sense of peace.

Sentence structure is disordered and contains repetition and incorrect noun phrasing. 'I like. Rural the most' is fragmented; use 'I prefer rural areas the most'. 'It's more nature' is ungrammatical—use 'there is more nature' or 'there is more natural scenery'. Repeated words ('more, more', 'they they') should be removed. Use semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses. Suggestion: reorder to 'I prefer rural areas the most because there is more nature; the trees and colors are more vibrant and they give me a sense of peace.'

× I think I prefer in other countries just because I've never traveled to another one, so it will be so exciting if I could take pictures of a different kind of a different country.

✓ I think I prefer other countries just because I've never traveled to another one, so it would be really exciting to take pictures in a different country.

Use 'prefer other countries' without the preposition 'in'. The conditional phrase should use 'would be' (second conditional for unreal or hypothetical present/future preference) rather than 'will be' with 'if I could'. Also, 'if I could take pictures of a different kind of a different country' is repetitive and awkward—simplify to 'to take pictures in a different country.' Suggestion: use 'would be really exciting' and 'to take pictures in a different country.'