Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 总体表现自然，回答直接，但存在语法和用词错误、冗长句子与时态不一致的问题。建议：1) 使用一到两句主题句直接回答（如：Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.）；2) 将支持细节控制在一到两句，注意时态一致（现在完成或一般现在）；3) 简化表达，避免重复（例如不要同时说“recording them is a good way to help me to remember”与“I can still see the pictures and remembered”），并使用连接词如“so”或“because”保持逻辑。具体练习：把句子改为简洁的现在完成或现在时，保持不超过5句。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I look at a photo months later, it brings back the atmosphere and details of that day. So I try to take pictures whenever I find something interesting.

提案: 回答有明确立场，但存在语法错误、冗余和表达不清的问题。建议：1) 开头用一句清晰的主题句（如：I prefer urban views.）；2) 用一到两句具体说明原因，避免重复（如“modern and fashionable”而非“modern and fashion”）；3) 注意人称和时态（“I live in Nanjing”而非“since I lived in I'm living”）；4) 使用连接词（because, for example, so）使论点更连贯。

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the skyline and modern architecture. For example, I live in central Nanjing, where tall buildings and lively streets create a fashionable atmosphere, so I find city scenery more appealing.

提案: 回答含义模糊且有明显词汇和语法错误（如“wheels”、“no definition”），句子结构混乱。建议：1) 使用明确的主题句（如：I prefer views in my own country.）；2) 给出具体原因并用正确词汇表达（例如：I rarely travel abroad, so I am more familiar with domestic scenery, which is diverse）；3) 注意时态一致与修饰词（use “has” not “had”）；4) 保持简洁，最多两到三句支持细节。

例: I prefer views in my own country because I rarely travel abroad and feel more familiar with local landscapes. For example, my country has a wide range of scenery—from mountains to coastal towns—which makes exploring at home very enjoyable.

× Of course, I like taking photos because I think recording them is a good way to help me to remember. After a few years, I can still see the pictures and remembered what happened that day.

✓ Of course, I like taking photos because I think recording them is a good way to help me remember. After a few years, I can still look at the pictures and remember what happened that day.

句中出现时态和动词形式问题： - “help me to remember” 中不需要不定式的不定式 “to”，更自然的表达是 “help me remember”。 - 第二句使用现在时描述在未来/之后仍能回忆，主句为一般现在时，应保持一致；原句中 “remembered” 为过去式，应改为一般现在时 “remember”。 - 另外将 “see the pictures” 改为更常用的短语 “look at the pictures”。 改进建议：在类似表示习惯或普遍事实的句子中使用一般现在时，避免把动词错用为过去式；动词短语请使用常见搭配（help sb (to) do → help sb do）。

× I prefer views in urban areas because there are a lot of tall buildings and since I lived in I'm living in Nanjing in the city center, the scenery there was very modern and fashion, so I like urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are a lot of tall buildings. Since I'm living in Nanjing city center, the scenery there is very modern and fashionable, so I like urban areas.

句中时态和形容词用法错误： - 原句混用过去时 “lived” 与现在进行时 “I'm living”，应根据说话背景选择一种，这里说明现在居住，应使用现在进行时或一般现在时，保留 “I'm living” 并去掉 “lived”。 - “fashion” 用作名词，但句中需形容词，正确为 “fashionable”。 - 句子过长且结构混乱，拆分成两句更清晰。 改进建议：描述当前居住状况用一般现在或现在进行时（I live / I'm living），形容词要用正确形式（fashionable），并注意句子连接的逻辑与标点。

× I prefer wheels in my own country because I seldom go to another country and I have no definition of that, and scenery in my own country had a lot of different types, so I like my own country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I seldom go to another country and I have no idea about that, and the scenery in my own country has many different types, so I like my own country.

代词与词汇使用错误以及时态问题： - 原句 “wheels” 是拼写/用词错误，正确应为 “views”。 - “I have no definition of that” 用法不当，应为 “I have no idea about that” 来表达不确定或不熟悉。 - “scenery ... had” 使用过去式 “had” 不符合一般陈述事实，应使用一般现在时 “has”。 - 此外，缺少定冠词 “the scenery” 更自然。 改进建议：注意单词拼写和选择（views vs wheels）；表达不确定用习惯搭配 “have no idea”；描述一般事实用一般现在时，并根据需要使用冠词。