Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I do), then briefly explain why using specific details and a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "get more experience from that view." Instead say what you enjoy (capturing light, mood, or interesting details) and give a short example.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me study how light and composition change in each place. For example, I like taking photos of city skylines at sunset to capture the colours and reflections.

提案: Give a clear preference and explain with specific, relevant reasons. Use linking words (because, for example) and avoid unclear phrases like "the gate area." Mention concrete urban features you like (architecture, street life, night lights) and keep it within a few sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architecture and lively street scenes. For example, city centres offer interesting buildings, colourful markets and night lights that make photos more dynamic.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar. State your preference (I prefer views in other countries) and explain why with specific reasons (new cultures, different landscapes, unique landmarks), using a linking phrase. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering landscapes and landmarks I haven't seen before. For example, visiting a foreign coast or historic city centre gives me fresh subjects and inspiration for my photography.

× Yes, of course, because I would like to get more experience from that view.

✓ Yes, of course, because I would like to gain more experience with that view.

The phrase 'get more experience from that view' uses an awkward preposition and verb choice. 'Get experience' is acceptable but 'gain experience with' or 'gain experience from' is more natural; here 'with' fits better because you gain experience by working with or photographing a view. Also 'that view' is acceptable if referring to a specific view. Suggestion: use 'gain' and 'with' to make the sentence natural and idiomatic.

× I think I prefer from urban area because of the gate, the gate area that I never have before.

✓ I think I prefer urban areas because of the gates, areas I have never seen before.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'from' after 'prefer' (use 'prefer urban areas' or 'prefer to be in urban areas'); singular 'urban area' should be plural if speaking generally; 'the gate, the gate area' is awkward and unclear; 'I never have before' uses incorrect word order and tense. Correction uses plural nouns and the present perfect 'I have never seen before' to indicate experience up to now. Suggestion: use 'prefer' directly with noun phrase, pluralize when speaking generally, and use present perfect for life experience.

× I prefer will form another country because the will form another country is I have never seen before.

✓ I prefer places in other countries because they are things I have never seen before.

The original uses incorrect future construction 'will form another country' which is ungrammatical here. 'Prefer' should be followed by a noun phrase (e.g., 'places in other countries'). The clause 'is I have never seen before' mixes tenses and order; use present perfect 'I have never seen before' and refer back correctly with 'they' or 'which'. Suggestion: replace the faulty phrase with 'places in other countries' and use 'they are' or a relative clause 'which I have never seen before'.