Views— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
受験者
Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it's relaxing, relax me and helps me clear my mind. For example, when I photograph a sunset or or a city skyline, I feel calm and inspired and I like keeping those imagine images to remember.
試験官
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
受験者
I prefer a waves, uh, urban areas to rural areas because, uh, urban areas are urban areas are modern and amazing areas. Umm, I relax urban areas this.
試験官
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
受験者
I prefer, uh, waves in, uh, other country because uh, it's uh, really amazing and, uh, interesting. Uh, I, I, I, I am going to studying other countries.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
スコア: 56.0提案: Сосредоточьтесь на более естественной и экономной формулировке, избегайте повторов и ошибок в словах. Начните с прямого тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали, используя связки (for example, because). Исправьте лексику (images вместо imagine) и избегайте лишних слов (relaxing, relax me -> relaxing and helps me).
例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it relaxes me and helps clear my mind. For example, photographing a sunset or a city skyline makes me feel calm and inspired, so I keep the images to remember those moments.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
スコア: 38.0提案: Устраните паузы и бормотание, говорите связно и ясно. Дайте чёткое утверждение в начале (I prefer...), затем объясните причину с конкретными деталями и примером. Избегайте тавтологии (urban areas are urban areas) и неправильных словосочетаний (I relax urban areas this).
例: I prefer urban areas because they offer modern architecture and vibrant street life. For instance, I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and busy streets, which capture the city's energy and variety.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
スコア: 40.0提案: Уберите заполнители и повторения, сформулируйте прямой ответ. Дайте причину с конкретикой: что именно делает виды в других странах интересными (культура, архитектура, пейзажи). Избегайте грамматических ошибок (I am going to studying -> I plan to study or I want to travel).
例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes that I haven't seen before. I plan to travel and study abroad so I can photograph unique architecture and natural scenes.
文法
× Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it's relaxing, relax me and helps me clear my mind.
✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it's relaxing, it relaxes me and helps me clear my mind.
The sentence uses 'relax me' which is incorrect word order and verb form. Use the subject 'it' with the verb 'relaxes' (third person singular) to agree with 'it' referring to taking photos. Suggestion: use 'it relaxes me' or 'it is relaxing' to express the effect. Grammar problem type ID: 13
× For example, when I photograph a sunset or or a city skyline, I feel calm and inspired and I like keeping those imagine images to remember.
✓ For example, when I photograph a sunset or a city skyline, I feel calm and inspired and I like keeping those images to remember.
There are duplicate words ('or or') and the adjective 'imagine' is incorrectly used instead of the noun 'imagined' or simply 'images'. The correct noun 'images' is sufficient. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'or' and use 'images' or 'photographs'.
× I prefer a waves, uh, urban areas to rural areas because, uh, urban areas are urban areas are modern and amazing areas.
✓ I prefer urban areas to rural areas because urban areas are modern and amazing.
'a waves' mixes singular article with plural noun and is incorrect. Also repetition 'urban areas are urban areas are' is redundant. Remove the article and redundant phrase; use plural 'urban areas' to compare with 'rural areas'. Grammar problem type ID: 1
× Umm, I relax urban areas this.
✓ Umm, I relax in urban areas.
The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing preposition. To express that the speaker feels relaxed in urban areas, use the preposition 'in' and the verb 'relax' in a correct form: 'I relax in urban areas.' This fixes sentence structure and makes the meaning clear. Grammar problem type ID: 26
× I prefer, uh, waves in, uh, other country because uh, it's uh, really amazing and, uh, interesting.
✓ I prefer views in other countries because they're really amazing and interesting.
'waves' is likely a mispronunciation of 'views' and 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. Use plural 'they're' to refer to 'views' or 'other countries'. Suggestion: say 'I prefer views in other countries' and match verb and noun number. Grammar problem type ID: 13
× Uh, I, I, I, I am going to studying other countries.
✓ I'm going to study other countries.
'going to studying' is incorrect combination. After 'going to' use the base form 'study'. Also, when talking about intent, 'I'm going to study other countries' is the correct future construction. Remove repeated fillers 'I'. Grammar problem type ID: 6
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