Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và phát âm; trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu hỗ trợ ngắn gọn với liên từ phù hợp. Tránh các tiểu từ như "umm" và sửa lỗi chia động từ và số nhiều (picture→pictures, view→views). Thêm lý do cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: cảm xúc, kỷ niệm, chia sẻ với bạn bè) và kết luận ngắn gọn.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it makes me feel relaxed. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes to capture peaceful moments. I also post my favorite shots on social media to share memories with friends.

提案: Sửa cấu trúc câu và sử dụng danh từ/ mạo từ đúng (a rural area hoặc rural areas). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "since". Tránh lặp từ và nói ngắn gọn, mạch lạc.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are calm and quiet. For instance, I enjoy photographing green fields and small villages since they help me relax and feel closer to nature.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (I prefer views in my country; my country has historical sites) và tránh lặp lại. Trả lời trực tiếp rồi đưa ra lý do cụ thể, ví dụ nêu một vài địa điểm lịch sử hoặc cảnh nổi bật. Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "for example" để làm rõ luận điểm.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many historical sites and familiar landscapes. For example, I love photographing old temples and colonial buildings that remind me of our heritage.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different view because it's the make me feel comfortable and umm. I can umm, so in my social media.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it makes me feel comfortable, and I can share them on my social media.

Use plural nouns after like + -ing when referring to general activities (pictures, views). 'It makes me feel' is subject-verb agreement: 'it' (singular) requires 'makes'. 'Share them on my social media' replaces unclear phrase 'so in my social media'. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general reference, ensure subject and verb agree, and use clear verbs like 'share'.

× I into prefer a rural areas because it is calm and very quiet.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are calm and very quiet.

Remove incorrect preposition 'into' and use 'prefer' directly. Use plural 'areas' consistently and plural verb 'they are'. Suggestions: do not insert unnecessary prepositions before 'prefer'; match number between noun and verb.

× I I can relate and comfort in rural area.

✓ I can relate and feel comfortable in rural areas.

'Relate' usually needs an object or 'relate to' something; 'comfort' is a noun, use 'feel comfortable' for the intended meaning. Use plural 'rural areas' for consistency. Suggestions: use 'relate to' or 'I can relate' with an object, and use 'feel comfortable' to express personal ease.

× I into a view in my country because in my country have historical and I I like a view in my country.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because my country has historical sites, and I like those views.

Remove 'into' and use 'prefer' with object. Use definite article 'the views' or plural 'views'. 'In my country have historical' is missing subject and verb agreement — use 'my country has historical sites'. Avoid repeating phrases. Suggestions: use complete clauses with subject + verb, include nouns for 'historical' (e.g., 'historical sites' or 'places'), and avoid unnecessary repetition.