Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容全面，但表达有些不自然与重复。需要注意时态和冠词用法，减少语气词（如“uh”），并用衔接词使句子更流畅。可把话分为主题句+1-2个具体细节，并结尾一句总结或个人感受。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views when I travel. I often take pictures of beautiful flowers, colorful landscapes and occasionally wildlife, because they capture the unique atmosphere of each place. I usually edit my best shots and share them on social media to keep memories and get feedback.

提案: 答案直接，但语法和表达不够精准，且句子结构略重复。可使用更自然的连接词并给出具体例子来加强说服力（如描述一两个你喜欢的乡村景象或感受）。

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in the city and now I appreciate the peace of villages and forests. For example, I love walking among tall trees and listening to birdsong, which helps me relax and recharge.

提案: 回答含义不够清晰，存在词汇使用错误（如“wheels”应为“views”，以及“belongings”应为“belonging”），句子冗长且语法不准确。建议先用一句主题句表明偏好，再用一两个具体理由或例子支持，注意词汇准确性和简洁表达。

例: I prefer views in my own country because local people and traditional architecture give me a strong sense of belonging. For instance, visiting ancient temples and chatting with local artisans helps me understand the culture better and makes the scenery feel more meaningful.

× Yes, I like taking pictures when I would travel.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures when I travel.

句中不应该用“would travel”来表示一般时间或习惯性动作。根据语境，考生想表达“当我旅行时我喜欢拍照”，这是一个习惯或一般现在时的状况，应该使用一般现在时或简单现在时的从句“when I travel”。建议用一般现在时来搭配“like + -ing”。

× During my trip I usually take photos for the beautiful flowers, uh, colorful landscape or wild animals, uh, I enjoy sharing my photos on my social media.

✓ During my trips I usually take photos of beautiful flowers, colorful landscapes, or wild animals. I enjoy sharing my photos on social media.

原句是复合句但连接不当且有介词与复数形式错误： 1) “During my trip” 若指多次旅行或习惯，应使用复数“During my trips”。 2) “take photos for” 用法不当，应为“take photos of”表示拍……的照片。 3) 名词单复数要一致：应为“colorful landscapes”。 4) 原句逗号连接两个独立分句，应改为分句或用连接词。建议分为两句，结构更清晰。

× I prefer views in rural areas because I lived in urban areas many years, so I enjoy rural areas like a village, trees and forest and so on.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I lived in urban areas for many years, so I enjoy rural places like villages, trees, and forests.

句中存在时态和名词形式问题： 1) “lived in urban areas many years” 缺少介词，应该为“lived ... for many years”表示持续时间。时态过去式“lived”可以保留，因为在解释已经生活过的经历； 2) “rural areas like a village, trees and forest” 结构混杂，应保持并列名词形式一致：使用复数“villages”与“forests”，并把“places”更自然地指代景观。建议补上逗号并调整名词复数。

× I prefer the wheels in my own country because the local people and traditional construction can make me feel a feeling of belongings and I may be know more about the views in my own country so I can have a deeper emotion about it.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because the local people and traditional buildings make me feel a sense of belonging, and I may know more about the places in my country so I can have a deeper emotional connection to them.

原句存在代词、词汇和搭配错误： 1) “the wheels” 很可能是误用，应为“the views”。 2) “traditional construction” 用法不自然，改为“traditional buildings”更恰当。 3) “make me feel a feeling of belongings” 词语使用错误且拼写错误，正确表达为“make me feel a sense of belonging”。 4) “I may be know more” 语法错误，不能同时用助动词“be”和动词“know”，应为“I may know more”或“I can know more”。 5) 最后一部分“a deeper emotion about it” 搭配不自然，改为“a deeper emotional connection to them” 更清晰自然。