School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is repetitive and a bit confusing. Try to avoid repeating the same information and keep your answer clear and concise. Also, avoid unnecessary phrases like 'I really love going to school to meet my love' which is unclear. Focus on directly answering the question with relevant details.

例: My school is located in Tri-City, Chandigarh. It is called JVC Nischan Republic School, and I find it an amazing place to learn because of its friendly environment and dedicated teachers.

提案: Your answer is good but contains some redundancy, such as repeating 'positive environment' and 'very'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating the same words. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure.

例: Yes, I like my school a lot because it has a positive environment. Moreover, my friends are very helpful and caring, and the teachers are highly qualified and always willing to listen to our problems.

提案: Your answer has many repetitions and some unclear phrases. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words like 'amazing' multiple times and check your grammar and pronunciation for clarity.

例: I believe my school is a great place to study because it has highly qualified teachers. Additionally, the school offers excellent sports facilities like basketball courts, tennis courts, and a swimming pool.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases and focus on specific aspects of the environment.

例: The environment at my school is very positive. The teachers are friendly and highly educated, which helps students succeed not only in academics but also in sports and extracurricular activities like singing and dancing.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to connect your points. Also, be concise and avoid repetition.

例: I believe interest in study is very important because every student has different strengths. Some excel in academics, while others are good at extracurricular activities. Developing interest helps children choose a career they enjoy.

× My school is located in My school is located in Tri-City, Chandigarh.

✓ My school is located in Tri-City, Chandigarh.

The sentence repeats the phrase 'My school is located in' unnecessarily, causing redundancy and incorrect sentence structure. Removing the repeated part corrects the sentence.

× My schools and the teachers in my school are amazing.

✓ My school and the teachers in my school are amazing.

The word 'schools' is plural but the context refers to a single school. Changing 'schools' to 'school' corrects the singular/plural agreement.

× The environment is really very good and the my school friends are really very helpful, caring, loving towards each other and my teachers are the best teachers in the world.

✓ The environment is really very good and my school friends are really very helpful, caring, loving towards each other and my teachers are the best teachers in the world.

The phrase 'the my school friends' incorrectly uses both the definite article 'the' and the possessive pronoun 'my' together. Removing 'the' corrects the article usage.

× They are highly qualified and they and they do listen to my problems all the time.

✓ They are highly qualified and they do listen to my problems all the time.

The phrase 'and they and they' is a repetition causing sentence structure error. Removing the repeated 'and they' corrects the sentence.

× I think a school is a building block of a children's development.

✓ I think a school is a building block of children's development.

The phrase 'a children's development' is incorrect because 'children's' is already plural possessive and does not need the article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× Guess my school is a great place to study becaused they have excellent and very and they have excellent and highly qualified teachers.

✓ I guess my school is a great place to study because they have excellent and highly qualified teachers.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'Guess' should be 'I guess' to include the subject pronoun; 'becaused' is incorrect and should be 'because'; the phrase 'and very and they have' is repetitive and incorrect. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× Plus they also have amazing amazing amazing basketball codes, tennis court, swimming pool and along with that.

✓ Plus they also have amazing basketball courts, tennis court, swimming pool and more.

The word 'codes' is incorrect; it should be 'courts' for basketball. Also, 'amazing' is repeated unnecessarily. Correcting the plural form and removing repetition improves the sentence.

× It is a very positive environment or though the teachers are really very friendly and helpful and they are highly educated so there is no this.

✓ It is a very positive environment although the teachers are really very friendly and helpful and they are highly educated so there is no issue.

The phrase 'or though' is incorrect; it should be 'although'. Also, 'there is no this' is incomplete and unclear; replacing it with 'there is no issue' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× So there is no chance that you might not.

✓ So there is no chance that you might fail.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or object after 'might not'. Adding 'fail' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× It is good in Academy academics as well as any sports.

✓ It is good in academics as well as in sports.

The phrase 'good in Academy academics' is incorrect; 'Academy' is unnecessary and 'academics' should not be capitalized. Also, 'any sports' should be 'in sports' to correctly use the preposition.

× It is also good in extracurricular activities like singing, dancing, etc.

✓ It is also good at extracurricular activities like singing, dancing, etc.

The correct preposition with 'good' when referring to activities is 'at' rather than 'in'. Changing 'in' to 'at' corrects the sentence.

× I think that every student has a different interests are some are good and different interests and they are good at their own things.

✓ I think that every student has different interests; some are good at different things and they are good at their own things.

The phrase 'every student has a different interests' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'interests'. Removing 'a' and adjusting the sentence structure corrects the singular/plural agreement and improves clarity.

× Some are good in studies and some are good in extracurricular activities like sports or dancing or singing.

✓ Some are good at studies and some are good at extracurricular activities like sports, dancing, or singing.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'good at' is the correct phrase. Also, listing items should use commas for clarity.

× I think it's really important to developer for a child to developer interesting study so as so as to have a career from it.

✓ I think it's really important for a child to develop interest in study so as to have a career from it.

The word 'developer' is incorrectly used instead of 'develop'. The phrase 'interesting study' should be 'interest in study'. Also, 'so as so as' is repetitive; one 'so as' suffices. Correcting these improves grammar and clarity.