School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly state the location of your school and provide a simple, clear description. Use complete sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

例: My school is located in the eastern part of the city. It is a well-known school where students work hard to achieve success.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant words. Focus on expressing your feelings about your school and mention specific reasons, such as extracurricular activities, in a clear and structured way.

例: Yes, I like my school very much because it offers many extracurricular activities that help me develop new skills.

提案: Your response is unclear and does not directly answer the question. Provide a clear opinion about your school as a place to study and support it with reasons.

例: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because it has qualified teachers and a quiet environment.

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks explanation. Describe the environment with specific details and reasons to make your answer more informative.

例: The environment at my school is not very good because the classrooms are crowded and noisy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Explain why interest in study is important and provide reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Interest in study is very important because it motivates students to learn and helps them understand the subjects better.

× My school is eastern part.

✓ My school is in the eastern part.

The sentence lacks the preposition 'in' which is necessary to indicate location. In English, we say 'in the eastern part' to specify where something is located.

× My school is situated interesting part in VR.

✓ My school is situated in an interesting part of VR.

The adjective 'interesting' needs to be preceded by an article 'an' and the preposition 'in' is required to indicate location. Also, 'part in VR' should be 'part of VR' to show belonging.

× In. Form 4 at it isn't wonderful school let's give our education to make 4 become successful in my.

✓ I am in Form 4. It isn't a wonderful school, but we give our education to become successful.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be split into clear sentences with proper subject-verb agreement and articles. 'Form 4' is a class level, so 'I am in Form 4' is correct. 'It isn't a wonderful school' requires the article 'a'. The rest is rephrased for clarity.

× He like.

✓ I like it.

The pronoun 'He' is incorrect here as the speaker is referring to themselves. 'I like it' correctly expresses personal preference.

× And get achievements.

✓ And get achievements.

This fragment is incomplete and unclear. It should be connected to a subject and verb to form a complete sentence, for example, 'And I want to get achievements.' However, since it is incomplete, no correction is provided here.

× Yes, I like my sleep too much 'cause they've given me many more, please.

✓ Yes, I like my school very much because they have given me many opportunities.

The word 'sleep' is incorrect; it should be 'school'. 'They've' refers to the school staff or teachers, so 'they have given me many opportunities' is appropriate. 'Please' is unnecessary and removed.

× Don't know.

✓ I don't know.

The subject 'I' is missing. In English, sentences require a subject, so 'I don't know' is correct.

× Like extracurricular activities.

✓ I like extracurricular activities.

The subject 'I' is missing. Complete sentences need a subject and verb.

× And I love my phone, said and.

✓ And I love my phone and said so.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It seems to be fragmented. A possible correction is 'And I love my phone and said so,' but the original meaning is unclear.

× And Fred? Between from other cities.

✓ And friends come from other cities.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Fred?' is likely 'friends'. 'Between from other cities' is incorrect; 'come from other cities' is correct.

× Yes, but. My card if you were calling my point of view. Anybody home, they can score.

✓ Yes, but in my point of view, anybody at home can score.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'My card if you were calling my point of view' is incorrect. It is corrected to 'in my point of view'. 'Anybody home' is corrected to 'anybody at home'.

× Very, very, very bad.

✓ The environment is very bad.

The answer is a fragment. Adding 'The environment is' makes it a complete sentence. Repetition of 'very' is informal and unnecessary.