School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly with correct tense usage. For example, start with a topic sentence stating where your school was, then add a detail if necessary, using proper grammar.

例: I used to attend a school in my hometown, which was close to my neighborhood. It was a convenient location for me as a child.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to give a direct answer followed by a reason or example. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I liked my school because the teachers were very supportive and the classes were interesting.

提案: Your answer has some good points but is not well structured and contains errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I believe my school was a good place to study because it had a friendly environment, and both the teachers and students were supportive.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then add specific details with linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: The environment at my school was very friendly. For example, the students and teachers always helped each other, which made studying enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear opinion with reasons or examples, and use correct sentence structures.

例: Interest in studying is very important because it motivates you to learn and helps you achieve your goals in life.

× Currently I am not attending the school, but when I was a child I'm going to the school in my hometown near my neighborhood.

✓ Currently I am not attending school, but when I was a child I went to the school in my hometown near my neighborhood.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present continuous ('I'm going') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). The verb tense should be past simple ('I went') to match the past time frame.

× Currently I am not attending the school, but when I was a child I'm going to the school in my hometown near my neighborhood.

✓ Currently I am not attending school, but when I was a child I went to the school in my hometown near my neighborhood.

The use of the definite article 'the' before 'school' is unnecessary when speaking generally about attending school. Omitting 'the' is more natural in this context.

× Of course, yes, I like my school. In fact every child is like to school who is The Who is starting those studies so.

✓ Of course, yes, I like my school. In fact, every child who is starting their studies likes school.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects verb agreement and word order.

× In fact every child is like to school who is The Who is starting those studies so.

✓ In fact, every child who is starting their studies likes school.

The verb 'is like' is incorrect; it should be 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'every child'.

× Gorgeous, I believe my school was was a good place for my studies over there already. Friendly environment and staff, teachers and students.

✓ I believe my school was a good place for my studies. It had a friendly environment, staff, teachers, and students.

The repeated word 'was' is an error. Also, the sentence fragments need to be combined into complete sentences for clarity.

× Friendly environment and staff, teachers and students.

✓ It had a friendly environment, staff, teachers, and students.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject; it should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.

× I I do like the friendly environment in my school. Also students are very friendly who are the studying with me. So we are very friendly umm.

✓ I do like the friendly environment in my school. Also, the students who study with me are very friendly. So, we are very friendly.

The phrase 'who are the studying with me' is incorrect; it should be 'who study with me'. Also, 'students' needs the definite article 'the' when specifying particular students.

× Also students are very friendly who are the studying with me.

✓ Also, the students who study with me are very friendly.

The preposition 'with' is correct here, but the phrase 'the studying' is incorrect; it should be 'study'. The article 'the' is needed before 'students' to specify them.

× This is very important for every life, of course, or without study. You can cannot, you cannot imagine in the life.

✓ This is very important for every life, of course, because without study, you cannot imagine life.

The phrase 'You can cannot' is incorrect; only 'cannot' is needed. Also, 'imagine in the life' is incorrect; it should be 'imagine life'. The conjunction 'because' clarifies the relationship between the clauses.