School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and precise. Instead of '25 to 30 kilometers area from my home', say 'about 25 to 30 kilometers away from my home'. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'from my home'.

例: My school is quite far from my home, approximately 25 to 30 kilometers away.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Instead of 'it's open since 30 years old ago', say 'it has been open for over 30 years'. Also, explain why you like your school with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I like my school because it has a long history of over 30 years and provides quality education.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Avoid saying 'my score is a very good place to study'. Instead, directly say 'Yes, my school is a good place to study'. Also, complete your sentence and explain why, for example, because the teachers are friendly and supportive.

例: Yes, my school is a good place to study because the teachers are very friendly and supportive.

提案: Your answer covers several points but can be more coherent and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid repetition. For example, say 'The environment at my school is pleasant, with many plants in the parks and playgrounds where children can play. Moreover, the school has a good education system and friendly teachers.'

例: The environment at my school is pleasant, with many plants in the parks and playgrounds where children can play. Moreover, the school has a good education system and friendly teachers.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. You should directly answer the question and explain why interest in study is important. For example, say 'Interest in study is very important because it motivates students to learn and achieve better results.'

例: Interest in study is very important because it motivates students to learn and achieve better results.

× It's about 25 to 30 kilometers area from my home.

✓ It's about 25 to 30 kilometers from my home.

The phrase 'kilometers area' is incorrect because 'area' is not used with a distance measurement here. The correct expression is simply '25 to 30 kilometers' to indicate distance from home.

× it's open since 30 years old ago.

✓ it has been open for 30 years.

The phrase 'since 30 years old ago' is incorrect. 'Since' is used with a specific point in time, and 'years old ago' is redundant. The correct form is 'has been open for 30 years' to indicate duration.

× Yes, my score is a very good place to study because the nature of the teacher.

✓ Yes, my school is a very good place to study because of the nature of the teachers.

The word 'score' is incorrect here; it should be 'school'. Also, the phrase 'because the nature of the teacher' is incomplete and needs 'because of' and plural 'teachers' to be grammatically correct.

× Teachers are very friendly and.

✓ Teachers are very friendly.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought. It should be a complete sentence: 'Teachers are very friendly.'

× There are lot of plants planted in the parks and playground for the children for playing and a very good education system.

✓ There are lots of plants planted in the parks and playgrounds for the children to play in, and there is a very good education system.

'Lot' should be 'lots' or 'a lot' when used with 'of'. 'Playground' should be plural to match 'parks'. Also, 'for playing' is better expressed as 'to play in'. The sentence also needs to be split for clarity.

× The teachers are very friendly in my school.

✓ The teachers in my school are very friendly.

The prepositional phrase 'in my school' should come immediately after 'teachers' to clearly indicate which teachers are being described.

× In current time studies everything.

✓ At present, studies are very important.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'In current time' is better expressed as 'At present'. 'Studies everything' is incorrect; the sentence needs a verb and object to convey meaning properly.